Comments | rt_challenge: Prompts #18 & 19

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Prompts #18 & 19

Jul 16, 2006 11:00

Prisoners of War
Author: meddow
Format: Ficlette ~500 words
Rating: PG
Warnings: None
Prompts: No. 18, garden path & No. 19, 19th Nervous Breakdown by the Rolling Stones
Summary: Some picnics happen. Others do not.
Author's Notes: This is really late. I wrote it, then went on holiday and missed the prompts, then forgot about it and then when fiddling ( Read more... )

meddow, prompt 19, prompt 18

Comments 6

writermerrin July 15 2006, 23:32:50 UTC

Hmm. I think the title is strangely appropriate. I like the contrast they were feeling between the magical and muggle worlds. Even though the ending was disconcerting, it had very strong emotions behind it.

meddow July 16 2006, 02:35:53 UTC

Thanks for the feedback. I'm very glad you liked the contrast which was the main thing I was trying to emphasis with this fic.

iamweebles July 16 2006, 01:52:57 UTC

You know, there was a prompt the last challenge (the picture of the Oxford spires) that set me to pondering the two worlds, side by side, and this piece has really expressed it better than I could have hoped. It's like a curious mirror with a great big dissonant crack right down the middle, and I like how the two of them are uncomfortable even in the midst of harmless normality. I really like it!

There is a typo (repeated phrase) in the second sentence: There was the one she was the one she was currently visiting

meddow July 16 2006, 02:34:10 UTC

Thanks. I really like the sort of implied situation that JKR has created with the same geographical place being both chaotic with a war going on and completely normal at the same time. I’m glad you liked it.

And thanks for pointing out the typo so I could fix it.

gunderpants July 21 2006, 08:05:11 UTC

Wow, this was really effective for such a short piece. The image of Remus and Tonks on a picnic really reminds me too much of Julia and Winston from '1984', and I love how even though there's no threat, there's no chance of enjoying ones' self either. Good stuff: I will go through and read all your fics from the challenge over the weekend, I think.

meddow July 21 2006, 09:50:39 UTC

Thanks. Thinking about it, it is kind of like that picnic Julia and Winston take in the countryside. Subconscious inspiration, I suppose. I must get my own copy of 1984, it’s been too long since I last read it. I’m very glad you like the fic.