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[godricgal]

Title: Difference

Author: godricgal

Prompt: 26

Rating: G

Prompt: 26

Warnings: none but experimentation

Summary: Tonks presents herself as a bubbly character, but there are further depths to be discovered.

Author’s Notes: Posting twice in one night! Inspiration is a funny thing, and it hit me twice today. I’m really not sure about this and I

Comments

[cassandrablack]

Hola!

This was great, really. It's incredible how in a few words you can manage to express something so complex. It's something that goes far away from HP, it's something that some of us feel sometimes. I love it. But again in canon, it fits very well. I never would have thought in it but it's very possible. Great job!!

And I'm the same who review at ff.net... and it's really your fault that I have a LJ because I got tired to search for this page every time I want to read ;-).

[godricgal]

Hello! Thanks for stopping by and for leaving a lovely comment.

and it's really your fault that I have a LJ

Sorry 'bout that, but it's fun, honest!

[mrstater]

Oh, I love this. Especially the last bit, about understanding dawning. That's exactly how I imagine that moment - and what a moment for her, which fits so well with what you've set up. I feel the relief.

On a technical note, you use second-person present tense in the first paragraph, but not in the other two. Was this intentional? The flow of that voice/tense is really nice - I wonder if you might do that throughout? Something like this:

It's what attracts you to him, why you long for his friendship, then later his love, because he can understand. You are the same in your differences.

After a million arguments, you watch as comprehension finally dawns in his eyes. You can love each other because you could understand each other and that, you realise, is truly the greatest blessing of all.

Just a thought. And my thoughts are quite often very wrong, especially about drabbles. :)

Wonderful thoughts. I just adore this aspect of Tonks and their relationship.

[godricgal]

Thank you very much, I'm pleased you liked it.

And thanks so much for the suggestion, it works much better this way.

[mercutio_rane]

This one is simply wonderful! So many great lines here and thoughts that really come together. I especially like the line "same in your differences." Bravo!

[godricgal]

Thank you very much. I'm glad you liked it.

[iamweebles]

I really love the idea of depths to her and you've put it forth in a beautiful, almost conversational way. I particularly like the echo of "It's hard" in the second paragraph. Perhaps you could even echo it again through the third, with something like "it's hard for him to understand, but after a million arguments..."

[godricgal]

Thanks for your comments. I had a good think about this and played around a bit. I couldn't fit in your suggestion as it's from Tonks pov and I'd have had to add too many words to get it in. So instead of 'it's hard' in the last paragraph, I've popped in 'it's easy'. I hope you think that works.

Again, thanks for your suggestions, I really appreciate it.

[anonymous]

I miss one day's reading on the ficathon, and Mrstater wants to write smut and you're posting twice in one day!

I haven't really got anything to add to comments already made; it's lovely. Especially as I'm all in favour of pieces that depict Tonks as having interesting layers as I don't quite see why she is forever depicted as the bubbly, straight-forward one. The repetition of 'It's hard...' followed by 'it's easy...' works really well now, as do the thoughts expressed throughout. :)

Gilpin.

[godricgal]

I miss one day's reading on the ficathon, and Mrstater wants to write smut and you're posting twice in one day!

That'll teach you not to stay away from fandom for too long ie. a day;)

Especially as I'm all in favour of pieces that depict Tonks as having interesting layers

There is so much more to her than is commonly portrayed in fics. She so much more of a complex character than she is often given credit for.

Thanks for the affirmation that the insertion of 'it's easy' works, I wasn't sure.

And of course, thanks for taking the time to comment.