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[godricgal]

Title: Connection
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[gloryforever]

If grief during war can be tempered with moments like these, perhaps she’ll survive after all.

Best line. Ever.

[godricgal]

Thank you. I'm so nervous about the fics I posted tonight.

*big hugs*

[bratty_jedi]

1. It constantly amazes how much emotion and imagery you can convey in so few words. Excellent job. I particularly enjoy the middle third:
A question of concern is voiced in his expression and her eyes reply with longing.

A connection, tenuous in reality, but strengthened in unconsciousness. He leans forward without a word to capture her lips in a kiss that speaks directly to her soul.

I'm still puzzling over exactly what you mean by "A connection, tenuous in reality, but strengthened in unconsciousness." Don't get wrong though, I think it is a good thing that I am puzzling about that. It is a very poetic line that can have many different meanings and I am having a great deal of fun playing with the possibilities.

2. Love the icon. I've seen that one before and I think it is priceless and so true.

3. Hate to be a party pooper, but... I could think of a few prompts for which this story might work. Did I miss where you mentioned the actual one that inspired you?

[bratty_jedi]

RE 3 above: either I did miss it or you edited your post and added it because now I see where you say Prompt 7. So just forget that bit of my message.

[godricgal]

Well firstly, thank you.

1. You can assume that the line was written pre-HPB. I meant to convey the uncertainty that happens in relationships when one isn't quite sure of the other. If you look at it from Remus's pov, he will be holding something back, he might not express how he feels but his physical expression will give him away.

3. Remembering all the points to address when posting is a weakness of mine. I'm a tweaker. I've made this error countless times in the past but you are the first to catch/pull me up one it!

Thanks for commenting though, I really appreciate it, if you don't get point two, I'd be all the more grateful for you letting me know. If my meaning isn't coming across, then it needs to be changed.

Thanks.

[mrstater]

I like your clarifcation at the end - it sort of narrows the focus of what's going on, but still leaves so much up to the imagination. Really love your work.

[godricgal]

I'm glad you liked it. Thanks again for your help.

[mercutio_rane]

Loved this one, especially the line about war tempering things -- a really wonderful thought.

[godricgal]

Thank you!

[iamweebles]

A connection, tenuous in reality, but strengthened in unconsciousness Ah, I love this line! What a beautiful way to describe a soulmate connection. Wonderful :)

[godricgal]

Thank you very much!