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[godricgal]

Title: Healing Moments
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[mrstater]

I don't really know a lot about drabble concrit, but I do know I really like this. It's got a very amber feel to it, if that makes sense. Autumn, quiet, warmth, that all flows thematically for me. It's simply a pretty piece.

[godricgal]

Thank you. Gilpin is right though, it does need a little more to it, I'm gonna play with it a bit.

[krumfan]

This makes me feel warm and fuzzy inside....:D...nice

[godricgal]

Glad you liked it!

[gloryforever]

Nice one, K!

[godricgal]

Thanks, G!

[gijane7702]

It's brilliant.

I can just see them; they slipped away and they are basking in the warm sun.

Beautiful :)

[godricgal]

Thank you.

[iamweebles]

There's a strong haiku feel to this: the invocation of the season, the pattern of syllables, the contrast of peace and war. I think it's great! It's not concrit so much as a suggestion - I think this would be stunning using a formal poetic structure (some form of multi-stanza haiku does suggest itself, but this would be beautiful in other forms as well). If you find the time to rewrite it that way (yeah, I know... time. sigh) I'd love to see it.

[godricgal]

I think this does need a little extra work. I'll keep your suggestion in mind when I do it. A little challenge I feel;)

I've been meaning to ask for some time - may I friend you?

Thank you for you comments and suggestions.

[iamweebles]

Oh yes, go right ahead! It makes me all warm and fuzzy when someone friends me :D (well, not *too* fuzzy - that would be yucky)