LJ Idol 10: Week 9: The Trolley Problem

[rswndrlst]

The Train Test

Sonia Terra grips the ladder and gives in to the temptation to look down at the track rushing away beneath her. She pulls herself up another rung. She has to keep going.
She hears Lynessa’s cries in her head again when she is violently jerked sideways as the train approaches a bend in the track. Sonia is granted an expansive view of

Comments

[tonithegreat]

Promises to keep and miles to go before she sleeps. I want to read more! Really enjoyed this.

[rswndrlst]

Yay! Thank you!

[encrefloue]

I love your style of world-building: fantastical yet familiar, guiding yet not overly expository. I was thoroughly enthralled by Sonia's plight and would happily read more and more!

[rswndrlst]

This is such an amazing comment thank you! I may have to revisit this charachter at some point.

[rayaso]

This is another way to approach the dilemma - try to find a way to save everyone. I love that you ended this as a cliffhanger.

[rswndrlst]

I am glad to hear the ending worked for you, I was afraid it would come off as a cheat but I as soon as I wrote it I had to do it!

[halfshellvenus]

So many people to save, so little time and power! Helping that last woman, in that moment, was hopeless, but there is still time for someone to heal her if the train she's on doesn't crash.

Protector or not, dangling off of a screaming train heading toward disaster is an unnerving situation, and you brought out the tension well.

[bleodswean]

So many different directions your girl is being pulled in! You've got a lot going on here and I really appreciated the insertion of another request for help there at the end of the piece.