LJ Idol 10: Week 7: Where I'm From

[rswndrlst]

Stories About the Jersey Devil

You're three thousand miles away from where you want to be so you decide to get drunk.

You wander through the back-streets and back-alleys of San Francisco with the bottle in one hand and the stub of a joint clutched between thumb and forefinger of the other.

You circle the blocks not really paying attention to your

Comments

[eternal_ot]

Wow! I loved the prose here. Each sentence has so much depth and life in it. Superbly written! Kudos!

[bleodswean]

This is a really effective and thoughtful piece about "where you come from". You did a great job moving between a poetic search for a story and then the retelling of memories and impressions of a child. I really liked your conclusion, both in this writing and in your heart/mind.

This line was perfection - You know the neighborhoods by the architecture and can navigate by the weather.

[rayaso]

I love the use of the two stories running together. It was a wonderful reminiscence. I also enjoyed the different ways of saying "I love you," including the Jersey Devil.

[penpusher]

One of the more unique takes on the prompt, and I don't know how many people know that Jersey Devil legend, and that it's not just a Hockey team name!

[alycewilson]

This is so heartbreakingly sweet. I could really begin to feel like I knew them. My condolences.