Fic: Turn the Night on Fire for such_heights

[paulamcg]

Title: Turn the Night on Fire
Author: paulamcg
Recipient: such_heights
Rating: PG-13
Highlight for Warnings: *smoking of unidentifiable grass*
Word Count: 1,173
Summary: In December 1978 celebrating solstice according to Lily’s idea means waiting for the sunrise and more.
Prompts: sunrise (and a first time, and a specifically Wizarding winter tradition)
Beta: The

Comments

[lotrwariorgodss]

Ooo very nice. You did well at capturing the mood of them being drunk and high and crazy teenagers (or barely adults?), in the way you described everything, and even in just the smallest pieces of writing. And I love that Remus isn't the bookish, serious one here. Lovely job!

[paulamcg]

Thank you so much for the praise. I’m glad you feel I succeeded in capturing the mood. You make me realise that my descriptions here are really small pieces of writing - and that Sirius does not word in his mind anything at all about Remus’s looks. (I wonder if he stopped himself, so as to avoid any demonstrations of his affection and desire in front of the others.) And when my Remus’s behaviour is far from the typical fanon Lupin’s bookishness and seriousness, he might not be easily recognisable. So good to hear that this little story worked for you in any case

[kingzgurl]

The DETAIL in this is brilliant! It just makes it feel so real and intense, and the shifting from Sirius-to Padfoot-to dreaming-to Sirius again just adds to the mystical quality of it all.

[paulamcg]

Thank you! Brilliant comments like yours (all of these offered so generously in this lovely fest) have helped me see there’s something strange - or perhaps just simple, primitive - about the way I use details here. Sirius just fleetingly registers some things as facts, then shifts to something else, also becoming something else. Perhaps that’s why this can be real and mystical at the same time.

[sea_shtick]

Ohh, I really enjoyed this. It does feel very real, and yet at the same time disjointed/dreamy, in that up-all-night-and-a-little-high sense. Just a bunch of kids out on their own, doing what they can. Man, it's so bittersweet, it just makes my heart hurt. So well done.

[paulamcg]

Thank you so much! I’m glad this seems to convey something like a disjointed feel of reality. It’s so good to hear you found this enjoyable and that these kids also touched your heart. I’m thrilled this works for you as bittersweet, too.

[secretsolitaire]

Ooh, gorgeous last line. I liked the dreamy feel of this, and the James/Lily proposals. *pets James*

[paulamcg]

I’m happy that, besides the dreamy feel, the last line, too, worked for you so well - a line with some quick turns but still without details of what could be considered the climax. Thank you so much - also for the love for James (and Lily)!

[midnitemaraud_r]

This has such a dreamy feel to it, and really fits the era. Such evocative language, and being inside Sirius' head like that, drifting - it's rather like free association, all those impressions that touch him, fleeting. The last line is just gorgeous!

[paulamcg]

Thank you so much for reading and for commenting to praise the language, too. I’m thrilled you feel this fits the era, and that being inside my Sirius’s head works so well for you. I simply found it the most natural thing to do: to craft a small gift in this way, drifting from impression to impression. It’s also reassuring to know that a last line like this - with a mere mention of the significant kiss - can appeal to you, too.