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Fic: Lost That Easy for escribo

Jan 06, 2014 12:10

Title: Lost That Easy
Author: veeagainst
Recipient: escribo
Rating: R for language and some sexual content
Word Count: 6278
Summary: For the prompt: During the first war, Remus is injured during a battle and Sirius finds him first

( ‘You didn’t meet with Fowler,’ is how Sirius greets Remus when he walks into the pub, and Remus thinks, Oh hell this again, hackles rising already, but all he says is a mild, ‘Hello, Padfoot, fancy a pint?’ )

rated r, bonus extras, 2013, fic

Comments 19

flaminia_x January 8 2014, 03:51:49 UTC

Beautiful! What lovely prose, and the descriptions are so poetically apt. Just wonderful characterizations, I love both Sirius and Remus in this (and James, and even Peter) - their hesitance and their insecurity and the fear and the loneliness and longing, and the love. And yes, Remus, that was a completely absurd statement to make, and it was utterly endearing and hot and sweet, and I loved it. Bravo!

veeagainst January 9 2014, 16:29:13 UTC

Thank you!! I'm glad you got all of that out of it, because that was what I was trying to do, but sometimes it can be tough to get all that subtlety in there.

escribo January 9 2014, 01:36:31 UTC

!!! Thank you so much for writing this! I'm glad my prompt prompted you :D This is really good, so well written. You've really deft hand for dialogue and what I call "describing the furniture"--the bits between the dialogue. You make this (and the boys) come alive. I love love love your Remus and your Peter, who is appropriately dodgy (so that I don't actually want to like him). The details are amazing, too. I really like this so much.

As a side note, the Natural History Museum is one of my most favorite places to visit in London and I have about a million pictures from there that I just spent a happy hour pouring over :D

veeagainst January 9 2014, 16:31:14 UTC

Thank you! I saw your prompt and wanted to write more and, as always happens to me, I wound up writing a LOT more. I like that phrase "describing the furniture", I shall have to remember that.

I am glad I could remind you of the NMH! I was just there the week after Christmas showing some friends around, I love it so much but it can be a madhouse. I'm a bit jealous that Remus got to see it alone at night...

mindabbles January 9 2014, 06:33:17 UTC

Wow, this is such an intricate and wonderful story. It is so rich. I loved the details and the dialogue. Oooh, wonderful Peter. Your adventure scene was great and I really am impressed with the way you showed the beginning of the group falling apart and the two of them coming together in the same time. Wonderful!

veeagainst January 9 2014, 16:34:44 UTC

Thank you! I love trying to write a believable Peter.

erised_rain January 9 2014, 07:03:29 UTC

Well, I just swooned too,so no need to feel bad, Remus dear, you're not the only one :P

Absolutely amazing! One of my favourites definitely :D

veeagainst January 9 2014, 16:35:08 UTC

Thank you :)!! I would almost certainly be swooning in that situation as well.

youcantseeus January 9 2014, 07:44:30 UTC

This was awesome. The part where Sirius says that Remus swooned like a Victorian Lady was like one of my favorite lines ever in a R/S fic. You write dialogue really well.

I like how you can see the distrust between the characters starting to creep in here, but they're fighting it. For me, this is one of the most interesting periods to write about the Marauders. And that moment when they first get together was just slow, sweet, and wonderful. I love it when Remus and Sirius get together during the First War when things seem so bleak and you handled it so well here.

veeagainst January 9 2014, 16:37:19 UTC

Thank you very much! I love writing dialogue so I'm glad to hear it worked! I often read these scenes out loud to myself to see if they sound ok and then my dog looks at me like I've lost my mind.