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Day 26 - Fic: The Sun Shines For You - Team AU

Oct 26, 2009 18:17

Team: Team AU
Title: The Sun Shines For You
Author: protegonox
Rating: R
Warnings: masturbation, ramblings, slight OOC of certain characters, frottage
Genre(s): flangst, humour
Word Count: 13 124
Summary: As a Ravenclaw with high ambitions and few friends, Sirius doesn't see that what he's missing is sitting right in front of him. Sometimes, quite literally ( Read more... )

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Comments 26

iheartremus09 October 27 2009, 18:46:19 UTC

I am so in love with this incarnation of Sirius I have no words. NONE. He seems so perfectly in charater that, had I not ever read the books, I would think him a Ravenclaw.

protegonox November 19 2009, 05:16:03 UTC

It is quite an honour to know that Sirius was so in character! I have a certain soft spot for Remus, which is who I had originally based my fic on until I got this vision of a Ravenclaw!Sirius, so I an very glad you liked him so much.

Thanks for commenting! :)

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protegonox November 19 2009, 05:16:55 UTC

Rereading it I noticed a few inconsistencies, which I will eventually fix and repost on my LJ, but I'm glad you thought it wonderfully written!

Thanks for the comment! :)

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protegonox November 19 2009, 05:18:50 UTC

I realized, once I finished writing the fic, that I had very few interactions between Sirius and Remus. Considering that they were supposed to be friends, I thought I had better add other scenes - which somehow led to that scene in that spare room with all that sexual tension. I'm still scratching my head at that one.

Thanks for the comment! ;)

aquila_star October 30 2009, 07:07:01 UTC

This was wonderful I liked the characterizations and the story felt very genuine. Just lovely. ♥

protegonox November 19 2009, 05:20:00 UTC

I love that you used the word 'genuine'. It's a very pleasant feeling to think of what I wrote as not being forced, which is one of my main fears when writing.

Thanks for the comment (and the heart)! <3

lady_luthienne October 31 2009, 20:20:33 UTC

O M G !
Snotty, loner, Ravenclaw Sirius is too much adorable to be handled. I love his interactions with the Marauders, and the way the narative comes out in his voice without being first person. I love Remus gently mocking him in his own quiet Remus fashion. Oh, and I love the closeness of the Black brothers and how Regulus' gradual abandonment of Sirius devistates him.

Love this line:

“I suppose, you know, it’s okay for us, since we are ponces.”

Yes yes and more yes. Down with socially enforced gender restrictions, I say.

protegonox November 19 2009, 05:27:29 UTC

In all honesty, I hate reading first-person narrative, but I like the perspective (does that make any sense?). I like being in someone's head without the structure.

Regulus was supposed to be a little more important, but I ran out of time. If I ever write a sequel, I definitely hope to bring him to his full potential. ;)

I loved that last comment about gender restrictions. Although sometimes unintentional, Society does unfortunately influence little boys and girls to act the way Society thinks they ought to because, or in spite of, their gender. I'm glad you enjoyed my little political spiel. :P

Thanks for the comment! :D