Fic - Team: MWPP - Come in from the Cold

[rsgamesmods]

Title: Come in from the Cold
Team: Team MWPP
Rating: Rish
Warnings: Language, boy!love, angst, poetry disguised in prose, sexual themes, a stolen scene from an old movie I can not remember
Summary: Things might have had a chance to alright, until he went and started to play the piano.
Prompt: The hands playing the piano
Genre(s): Angst

Comments

[maxwrite]

This is really lovely. I had to stop reading for a moment and just breathe, 'cause I thought I was going to tear up (I've been terribly weepy lately). I don't think I had trouble figuring out what was going on. I really like how you've illustrated the progression of their lives in kind of a whirlwind of words and imagery, just going from one thing to another. It feels... real somehow, because that's how memory works; there are no neat little scene dividers. I don't know how to explain it exactly, it's just really lovely.

[tourdefierce]

It feels... real somehow, because that's how memory works; there are no neat little scene dividers

Oh yes, you've described it perfectly.

I'm very pleased that you liked it because it is just a whirlwind of emotion and boy.

But now you've gone and made me blush.

[loveangelstar]

Wow I'm so glad I eventually got the chance to come and read something I've had bookmarked for like ever! :)

This was really deep. Your style is so original. This whole thing felt kinda disjointed like they weren't really sure where the bits ended or began and everything flowed together like a dream.
This bit was like, gah!
sirius says: i love you. i know you know. but i... i love you.

he sits. he stares into grey eyes and kisses sirius' mouth before slipping out of his pants and pressing into jutted hips. sirius' mouth kisses at him.

he says: i know. do you know?

sirius jerks, eyes slipping shut before opening again.

sirius says: yes. say it.

he says: i love you. and the world falls apart.

Wow...

Well done, I've never read anything like this before :)

[tourdefierce]

Hey! I'm glad you got around to reading this and joining my f-list for that matter.

I'm really glad you enjoyed it. I took a real chance when I wrote it because I've never written anything, remotely like this before. But they just yelled at me until it happened. I'm so happy it turned out like this but I was so worried about the reception of it.

The part you quoted: I just wanted something that resembled forgiveness. And sex. ; ) But also managed to tie in everything that happened in the story.

I'm glad you liked it, especially how it flowed kind of disjointed and dreamy.

Thanks for commenting!