Day 3 - Team Magic - We Might Fall

[rsgamesmods]

Team: Magic
Title: We Might Fall
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: Angst
Word Count: 7137
Summary: Behind the veil, Sirius unwrites his life, one electric light at a time.
Prompt: #62 - "She said she knew she was able to fly because when she came down she always had dust on her fingers from touching the light bulbs." - from Franny and Zooey by J.D.

Comments

[leontinabowie]

This was a beautiful read. You wrote it with such magic, and it really shone through.

It was bittersweet, which gave a nice balance to the angst. The hints to all the senses were there but without overpowering the words, and it worked really well.

Really lovely work :)

[zambla]

holy shit, that was beautiful, beautiful.

this:
And he had leaned in … leaned in, pretending to be an animal, something familiar

that really had me. the way (Sirus's) life is constructed out of snatches of thought, associations, phantasmagoria of the mind.

cheers.

[mutuisanimis]

James, as a Potter, certainly had known what he was doing when he sat down next to Sirius. He had to have known, even then, that Sirius was going to be in trouble for being sorted into Gryffindor, but, even more importantly, that it wasn’t a mistake: Sirius belonged in Gryffindor. -- that's powerful. I like that version of James meeting Sirius.

Sirius trying to choose Slytherin in order to protect James later on. My heartbreak.

He looked different than when Sirius had last seen him. Older. (Although that not nearly as old as Sirius would have hoped.) -- STOP I'M CRYING

“I almost unmade us,” Sirius breathed.
“I’m glad you didn’t,” Remus murmured, kissing Sirius’ hand softly. “I heard from a very good source that we had a good thing.”
Sirius smiled sheepishly.
“We do have a good thing, Remus,” Sirius said, another quick kiss pressed to Remus’ mouth. -- WEEPING, THIS IS GORGEOUS, WOW

[youcantseeus]

Gorgeous, gorgeous fic. I love afterlife fics and this was such a good one. I loved the concept of Sirius trying to change the past after his death. He always seemed to feel so much guilt about James's death and I think you've dealt with that in a really interesting way here. My heart just kept breaking when Sirius kept forgetting stuff about Remus and James, but he still remembered enough to know how important they were. And then that scene where the others come to him at the end -- pure perfection.

[huldrejenta]

Goodness, this fic... So beautiful, so heartbreaking, and so wonderful ending!

This wasn't how this was supposed to go , and how Sirius feels that this defines his life, really got to me. It's so sad the way Sirius sees himself - Too much hot-headed bravery... - ...and when had it ever served him well?
And then when Sirius' memories start slipping away, oh my heart.
Love the ending -
absolutely gorgeous work!