Comments | royalwisteria: open-mouthed smile

royalwisteria

open-mouthed smile

Mar 03, 2013 20:55

ontae
pg-13 (hate ratings bc I don't get them)
wc 3137
warnings: taemin's a minor, if that bothers you
(unedited so there might be inconsistencies/typoes

( He likes slender ankles, hair tucked behind ears and eyes that blink too often. )

pairing: ontae, oneshot!fic, fandom: shinee

Comments 12

000miki March 4 2013, 04:01:35 UTC

i'm in love
oh god

royalwisteria March 11 2013, 17:11:22 UTC

haha thanks!! I might write a sort of epilogue/sequel to this as well, like a couple years in the future or something

midwest_loli March 4 2013, 14:37:21 UTC

this is so beautiful <3

royalwisteria March 11 2013, 17:11:36 UTC

alsdjfladskj thank you!! ; ;

midwest_loli March 11 2013, 23:08:41 UTC

No problem love :DDD

shinyshawol March 4 2013, 18:33:59 UTC

this is too lovely! i really like how the story flows! and oh my heart breaks a little when jinki rejected taemin because he's just a minor!

i love the fluffy ending <33

royalwisteria March 11 2013, 17:12:55 UTC

well I don't exactly blame him because jinki clearly remembers taemin when he was a middle schooler so he has a lot of preconceptions of who taemin is and it's difficult for him to see that taemin is not that kid anymore-- it is also technically illegal for him to do anything sexual with him since he's not yet 18.

thank you!!!

onew_4ever May 18 2013, 19:56:31 UTC

OMO I LOVE IT, fantastic job; I'm so glad that Taemin took the first step and kissed him, so cute; I really really hope that you do a sequel I wanna read it so so bad. <3 ;-P

fleckled February 21 2014, 04:32:56 UTC

So I read this a while ago and was immediately enamored with your writing, and I thought of you again yesterday and here I am. This is really nice, I love the pacing and your characterizations are so on-point and subtle. Taemin is this great mixture of teenage earnestness and his own natural energy, I really love it. Age gaps are interesting and I think they're hard to do well. The fact that Jinki feels so wrong the entire time adds a layer of realism I think some people neglect in fics along these lines. I love your style (those parts about slender ankles, the tiny mentions of smiles scattered throughout..! Ahh I'm swooning it's so...soft stylistically and I love that) and I just really really enjoyed this, again! Thanks for posting!

Oh P.S. this makes me chant O-T-P, O-T-P