Deal part 5A

Sep 20, 2006 03:07

title: Deal
fandom: SV
rating:3
pairing: Clark/Lex

Part 5A )

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norwich36 September 20 2006, 09:59:58 UTC
I love a lot of things in this paragraph: Adam suggested that they bathe him, and the two of them lowered him into a tub of warm water. The flow of water over his skin made his muscles tighten all over, and he looked so frightened, Clark stripped off and sat in the tub with him, held him, even though the touch of his hands made Lex panic. Clark kept talking to him, filling the air with soothing, crooning sound, telling him what had happened while he gone, telling him what they were doing for him, how much he cared, finally just nonsense words, anything to keep Lex distracted. He talked until his voice was dry, until he couldn’t speak, and all he could do was rock him in the tepid water. Adam stood against the wall, watching the two of them for a long time before he could make his legs obey him, and walked out of the bathroom to give the two privacy. I love Clark taking care of Lex here, the gentleness of it, and it's great for the reader to witness though I'm being to think Lex is beyond being taken care of. I also like the ( ... )

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roxymissrose September 21 2006, 02:59:39 UTC
I'm copying this out onto the palm of my hand to look at every time I feel like I suck beyond belief.

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norwich36 September 21 2006, 05:04:59 UTC
I've never read anything of yours that wasn't well written, even if you are often tearing my heart into little pieces and stomping all over it with hobnailed boots.

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danceswithgary September 20 2006, 11:26:12 UTC
You're scaring the pants off me with this.

Alter it just a little bit-- he could change just small bits and they’d all still be the same, just…missing a little pain. A part of him that was starting to feel bigger, and colder in his mind whispered or they’d be just what you want them to be, however you want them to be.

It's a good scary, really, it's OK to get a little scared... *walks away chanting*

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roxymissrose September 21 2006, 02:58:16 UTC
Gosh, you make my heart sing!

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talitha78 September 20 2006, 11:54:27 UTC
I'm always fascinated by the ways you explore the meaning of power. In every story, it's different.

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roxymissrose September 21 2006, 02:57:49 UTC
Wow, thank you very much.

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ex_lexsbabym701 September 20 2006, 15:04:51 UTC
I don't know what to say. And I find that odd 'cause I usually don't know how to stop talking. Part 5 was a really difficult read for me, and I don't know if I'll ever be able to comment on it properly. That was the first time I'd ever read anything that made me think, "Whoa, this is too much pain, too much suffering. I can't process this." And I'm really, really, really trying not to wrap my mind around the idea of our Lexy living (his spirit or mind or whatever) inside of a body that is completely or damned near completely destroyed like that ( ... )

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roxymissrose September 21 2006, 02:56:19 UTC
don't worry about Lex's outside--I don't think I can write a story about Lex trapped in his body like that...at least until you brought it up, hmmmm....

I'm certain that it will all become much less creepy and sad and confusing soon. I love you for sticking with this!

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frelling_tralk September 20 2006, 15:07:09 UTC
Awesome!!!

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roxymissrose September 21 2006, 02:49:45 UTC
LOL! thank you! That makes me feel good!

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frelling_tralk September 21 2006, 20:23:41 UTC
I rec'd you in my phone post! I'm not sure how many people listened to it though *g*

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