Very nice. Everything is spot-on, from Peter's willingness to do almost anything to be liked (and get ice cream) to the way Sirius is categorically unable to gaze broodingly at the sea. It's wonderful!
A lot of really rather neat imagery here, like Sirius' old swim outfit and skinny little Remus in his too-big trunks; makes it really easy to picture. The dialogue also rings very true, especially the bit about sharks. Oh, little boys and their sharks.
I think that Remus would be a very serious-minded boy, before the others corrupted him. Children who've lived with a disability after are more grounded.
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Sirius is always fun to write, at any age.
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