Comments | rose_griffes: done

rose_griffes

done

Dec 23, 2006 11:42

so here it is:

Title: Prophecy
Rating: PG-13? Some violent cylon deaths.
Characters: Kara/Leoben
Spoilers through 3.04
about 3,700 words
setting: future (the fleet has made it to Earth)

eta: Thanks to my brother for a quick-read through; thanks also to natalexx who read it after I posted it and helped with those pesky commas and verb tenses ( Read more... )

myfic, leoben, bsg

Comments 16

natalexx December 23 2006, 23:37:20 UTC

Wow, I really like it. It's a totally new approach to Leoben. I was fascinated to see how it all came together and there were just enough clues and interesting tidbits to keep it from being too confusing--it's still mysterious, but in that way that Cylons are supposed to be. And there aren't a lot of Colonials-on-Earth stories that feel this real. Really original way to give Kara/Leoben a happy(-ish) ending.

I admit I was looking for clues about Lee. *g* Deliberate choice to leave him out of the story? Just curious. Dude, is the female friend who is still in detention Cally, though? Cool. That would be *so* very Cally.

The bits about Kara examining his past were terrific! And I love the explanation for the art in the cell on New Caprica, too.

rose_griffes December 24 2006, 00:19:21 UTC

Yay! After posting that request to you to read it, I felt all guilty... like showing someone baby pictures, and expecting them to be admiring. So, thanks a bunch, and sorry for imposing.

I admit I was looking for clues about Lee. *g* Deliberate choice to leave him out of the story? Just curious.

Yup. I killed both the Adamas en route to earth. That's just the kind of cold woman I am. Killed Anders too... or maybe he left her for Barolay. I finally decided that Kara just wasn't going to open up about them to Leoben. (or I just couldn't write it the way I wanted.)

Dude, is the female friend who is still in detention Cally, though? Cool. That would be *so* very Cally.

Mmhm, that's our Cally. I thought about saying something about permanent damage from bite marks, but decided it was too obvious.

Really original way to give Kara/Leoben a happy(-ish) ending.I wasn't intending to have the sort-of-shmoopy when I started. But it just wouldn't end itself any other way. So now I just tell myself that when his programming is ( ... )

petitevanou December 24 2006, 14:21:24 UTC

I absolutely adore your fic for several reasons ( ... )

rose_griffes December 26 2006, 10:37:02 UTC

Thank you so much. I agree, the Kara/Leoben relationship is fascinating... twisted but interesting!

I find that the somber look you give him in the end, almost reveals ( in my mind) that he is HER Leoben, that it was all planned to finally let her fall for him, as he had said she would. Now please tell me, is that what you had in mind, or, did you want to leave the ending ambiguous enough for the reader to create its own interpretation.When I started writing this story, I was certain that 1) the Leoben in my story was a true sleeper agent, completely unaware of his true nature, and 2) he was not Kara's Leoben. The more I wrote, the less certain I was of either idea. He became more and more mysterious ( ... )

petitevanou December 26 2006, 19:51:31 UTC

When I started writing this story, I was certain that 1) the Leoben in my story was a true sleeper agent, completely unaware of his true nature, and 2) he was not Kara's Leoben. The more I wrote, the less certain I was of either idea. He became more and more mysterious.

this is exactly how I felt about your story, the last words made it all very dark and mysterious and left you thinking, well wait a minute... again, I hope you write more, because I Am craving for for more stories like these :D

Tu parles francais ?

stormymouse December 24 2006, 15:08:48 UTC

wow. petitevanou guided me here and i'm glad i followed her lead. this is wonderful.

rose_griffes December 26 2006, 10:38:26 UTC

Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it. (I love your icon!)

snarkyducky December 25 2006, 02:34:13 UTC

got here via petitevanou..
i love this story so much -- it's the story i wished i had been able to write -- the art images are so vivid, and it's amazing how well Leoben fits into life on Earth like the way you created it. i'm actually very glad that you let the story end happily.. i'm very fond of happy endings, but in my humble opinion this one isn't cloying at all; it's just right. and it's a beautiful story that i can read over and over again and feel happy reading it.. that's a great accomplishment for a pairing like Kara/Leoben, because it takes a lot of work to make me believe in some sort of happiness for them, and yet this piece of art is just perfect.
thank you so much for sharing this!
♥

rose_griffes December 26 2006, 10:40:04 UTC

Thanks! I'm glad you liked the art references. I think if Kara had the time and supplies, she would be immersed in her art quite a bit.

anonymous January 4 2007, 01:11:48 UTC

I loved this--good Kara/Leoben fic is hard to come by.

I liked how you made the Colonial tongue a different language. So, at the end, is Kara returning the "I love you" in her language or saying something more like "I know you're a frakking toaster"?

rose_griffes January 4 2007, 19:27:41 UTC

Oh, she definitely says I love you, and is surprised/dismayed when she realizes she's fulfilled New Caprica-Leoben's prophecy. (I blame Joss Whedon, ever since "Buffy" I have to take tv prophecies seriously!--heh)