But Broken Lights - Chapter Eleven

[rosa_acicularis]

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O when her life was yet in bud,
       He too foretold the perfect rose.
       For thee she grew, for thee she grows
For ever, and as fair as good.

“Speech is but broken light upon the depths of the unspoken.”
George Eliot

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She awoke to the strange sensation of something vaguely slimy moving over her nose. She batted at it

Comments

[akeyoftime]

All hail the almighty banana and some good old-fashioned UST!

I have a confession to make. I absolutely loved the first four chapters when I came upon them. Chapter Four blew me out of the water with it's awesomeness. (... and LiveJournal recognizes that as a word.) And then you trapped Rose and the Doctor in a pit and I nearly gave up on the whole thing, because I've read so much fanfiction since coming into online fandoms and I've seen the "Trapped in a pit/broom closet/cave/prison/whatever" thing so many times. But your characterization and your dialogue are so fantastic that I kept going and somewhere along the way, I stopped caring about the trapped-in-a-pit, because I was enjoying the story so much. I'm looking forward to the sequel! It sounds like it will be an excellent mystery for our duo to solve.

[rosa_acicularis]

I've seen the "Trapped in a pit/broom closet/cave/prison/whatever" thing so many times.

It really is the most horrible cliche, isn't it? Yet simultaneously awesome, I would argue, because in real life, people never have the conversations they don't want to have. Most of us are so good at avoiding the hard conversations, the things that need to be said but won't because, the big truths? Scary.

But in fiction you can just stick two avoidy people in a broom closet (or elevator, as was once my preference) and, suddenly, there's no easy way out of the conversation. Also, if you're as dependent on dialogue as I am, it's much easier to write.

So it's a cliche and an unrealistic cheat. Whee! I'm so proud of myself. *pats self on back*

Thanks for sticking with it anyway. I really appreciate your comments!

[akeyoftime]

I'd completely forgotten about the elevator option! And I spent years in Star Trek fandoms! *hangs head in shame*

It's like I said in that rather round-about manner - good writing can breathe new life into any stereotype :)

I know we had this conversation on Do I Twist, Do I Fold (where I commented on a growing love for the Master), but I've been watching more Classic Who (and as luck would have it, it's all been Master episodes) and he's still awesome, even without John Simm's antics.

[selenityshiroi]

I've absolutely adored the entire series! The dialogue and characterisations are outstanding!

And a sequel? I am a very happy person indeed! I shall look out for it with great anticipation! (My goodness I sound formal...you wouldn't believe I've just been watching Pride and Prejudice!)

[marble_rose]

GUH. You are a shameless tease. This chapter was hotter than some of the smut I've read and the only thing that happened was a little bit of touching.

[trinity_tragedy]

YAAAAAAAAY! You rock at life, win the intuhmawebs and rule the entire WORLD!! Your overall awesomeness astounds me! What a story! I hope there are more stories to tide me over until the next one begins!

*overwhelmed* Thankyou so much, I will await your next glorious tale with bated breath!

T.

[earlgreytea68]

It's been a long, horrific day, and I finally finished working and found this waiting for me and it was LOVELY. Yes, the UST was phenomenal, but the Doctor's enthusiasm over the fire-breathing manatee? That was BRILLIANT.