[Uraboku] Bruises and Bitemarks (6/?)

[rooftop_sakura]

Title: Bruises and Bitemarks
Author: masanami
Character(s): Hotsuma/Shusei, mentions of Senshirou/Kuroto, Tsukumo/Touko, Takashiro, Tachibana
Word Count: 4,094
Rating: R
Warnings: Host AU. Suggestive material.
Summary: Shusei's the perfect host and Hotsuma's the perfect person to ruin everything for him.
Author's Note: This chapter is a bit shorter because

Comments

[white_cross_b]

I'm so happy that you're still continuing this fic! It was the perfect thing to wake up to this morning. I'm anxious to see what's going to happen after the excitement of the previous chapter. Some nice insightfulness from Hotsuma in this chapter. Can't wait to see what happens next! Thanks for the update.

[masanami]

Thank you for the comment!

As always I'm glad you're enjoying it and continuing to read^^ I thought it was about time I gave a little bit of Hotsuma's POV on the events so far as well as create a bit of tension for what's to come ♥ more to come soon~

[haru_kurofai]

For me, a successful AU fic needs to give the same feelings and vibes between the characters, no matter how their background have changed. The one thing that's really important to me is to see how they have kept their original canon bonds and to see it develop in the new settings. Masa-chan, you have totally perfected it *hugs*

I love seeing Hotsuma getting angry and frustrated over losing contact with Shusei, not purely because of this, but he was more angry at himself realising he doesn't actually know much about Shusei at all. He made his best effort to try and reach him regardless. His banter with Kuroto made me smile :3 And the way Hotsuma snapped at Tsukumo and Touko and feels guilty about it? The blonde needs a big hug from Shusei ;w;

Tsukumo is a sweetheart, whichever universe he is in! It makes me happy to see Tsukumo and Touko-chan being a couple rather than siblings, especially after the recent manga chapters!

Masa-chan, I love the new chapter length! I can read it in one go during my break times with no disruptions :3

[masanami]

wah Haru-chan *hugs* I'm really, really glad to hear that. You have no idea how I fret over some of these scenes and whether they will appear cohesive with the character's personalities from canon--especially since I took away some of the key defining elements of Hotsuma and Shusei's relationship--it's been really tricky. But I'm glad it seems to be working so far in this AU I've created

[usagi_chanyuu]

Loved it!!!!! Although it makes me sad that there's no Shuusei. It makes me more eager to read the story.

[masanami]

Shusei will be back soon, promise~ but glad you enjoyed it even with the Hotsuma focus!

Thanks for commenting!

[fourth_axis]

I generally don't read AU fics, but the "host" part got me interested. I'll leave my over-all critique of all the chapters so far. Not sayin' I'm any good at giving a decent critique but I feel the need to at least try, it's only fair to the writer :D

[masanami]

First off, thank you for leaving the comment and the critique! Since this is my first attempt at an AU and you've liked it enough to read it this far I'm glad it seems to be a good read for you

[fourth_axis]

Ahh, a visit to Japan, no wonder. Should have seen that coming with the amount of detail that went into it and the district. Definitely not something you can get from photos alone and some Googlin'.

"a large part of this fic deals with the conflicts of the world that the hosts live in and the perception of their profession and having characters "outside" that sphere is an important aspect to that."

THAT! That I forgot to mention -- It was very fun to read, no, to explore as a character. It was an original trait given to a predefined character and it really fit with Shusei's coldness as seen in the manga. Also it continues to be a pivotal point of the story. Well played, I must say!

I'll be on the look-out for more. Cheers! :D

[masanami]

Ahh sorry for the late reply--busy week!

I always thought Shusei's personality was perfect for the role of a host--because in researching them you see that they have to be rather cold in order to do the job they do. Seeing this so much in Shusei is really what drove me to write this story because I definitely saw him relating to the job of a host. I imagine that the "girlfriends" he had in the manga were treated in much the same way he treats the girls in my AU--doing all the right things but never really having any feeling behind the actions he was performing--of course until Hotsuma comes along^^

Thanks again for the comment and discussion!