"Angel of darkness" 2nd. chapter (I respond to your blackmail Lali!!!)

[roguemarch]

Hi everyone, this is the next installment of my fic "Angel of darkness". As always, this one goes to all my friends here.

This is  unbettaed and english is not my first language.

You can check the first part: Chapter I: Early one morning

On with show then.

Comments

[cmk418]

Fun stuff. Keller and O'Reily working together. That definitely spells trouble for Beecher. Can't wait to see what happens next!

[roguemarch]

Thanks for reading!!! I love O'Reily, he is the most fun to write!!!

[lalioz]

Oooh, is O'Riley one of the undead himself? Or is he Keller's minion? Wait, what am I talking about!! It's O'Riley we are talking about, I bet he's like one of the uber undeads!!LOL

Can't wait for more!

Ummm, one thing though, if I may? In my opinion, you don't need to give entire history of a person,or the circumstances of their relationship in one sentence. I find it's much better if you like hint at it, or just spread it thinly, like there's time to find out about them further down the line. Maybe some facts will then come as a surprise, or like a starting point for a twist or something like that,you know,to keep things interesting.But that's just me.

[roguemarch]

You know what? your are right, that's much better to keep the tension. Thanks for the advice!

[lalioz]

Ummm I feel terrible for like ummm lecturing ya up there...I mean, who am I to judge .
I really like the story and where it's going!!!

[roguemarch]

Hahaha, no please do. It's my first try at writing and all opinions are valuable to polish my technique!

[lalioz]

Please don't unfriend me.......

[roguemarch]

hahahaha, why would you say that?

[lalioz]

Yeah, I knew ya wouldn't but, I really do suck in criticism...I always feel so uncomfortable doing it!And that's supposed to be my job, art criticism that is. LOL

[roguemarch]

LOL I know what that it's like, I have a freelance job as movie critic for a magazine, but I really suck giving a critic hahaha!

[trillingstar]

Oh, I hope Beecher's friendship with O'Reily hasn't been based on lies for the past decade! That would suck :( Although one of Keller's strategies was to isolate Toby. But - the 'Stranger' from part 1 seemed... nicer than that. Ooh, I hope they get to meet up again in the next part! :D

[roguemarch]

Thanks for reading, your input and the one of my flist is very important for me. :)