Comments | rocket100: And the thrilling conclusion!

nekusagi in rocket100

And the thrilling conclusion!

Jan 28, 2008 16:02

Here's part II of the story I started on the previous post. If you've not read part I yet, go do that now (it's below this one), or you'll have no idea what's going on (stupid LJ, putting the newer ones on top. Real convenient.)

39. Wall
Kali was having a hard time. Nekou was stuck, somewhat unfairly, battling a very annoyed Golem... The majority of ( Read more... )

sneasel, nekusagi's fics, team rocket, oc, hitoshi, 39

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systemaurora January 28 2008, 22:16:52 UTC

Not bad... how does this relate to evil teams though? I'm sure it does, I just couldn't figure out how. I'm confused as to who the characters are and is Hitoshi evil? Is Nekou a Pokemon or a person? Sorry if this seems stupid, but I'm still a bit new here and have always had a hard time figuring out OC's in fanfiction.

Also, I have dyslexia so I had a hard time reading it because the lines were close together... as long as your story is behind a cut most people don't care if you're a space hog and use lines between all of your paragraphs, like I did in this post. ^_^ I started doing it for my baby brother who's severely dyslexic before we knew I had some issues with it (oddly enough, I never had trouble until a year or so ago when my eyesight changed drastically), but it really helps even if you're not dyslexic. Looks neater, I think.

blackjackrocket January 28 2008, 22:31:47 UTC

Nekou's her Rocket OC. Hitoshi's a canon Rocket from one of the mangas, but he's kinda like Mondo, never presented as evil.

But yeah, I have trouble with the non-spaced formatting too and I don't have anything like that.

nekusagi January 30 2008, 14:08:03 UTC

Well, Blackjack answered that well, but...

Yeah. Nekou was the one mentioned in that Sebastian story. Talking to him. Although I can see how that confused you.

Nekou and Hitoshi are kinda neutral... she DEFINITELY has issues with a lot that goes on, but (usually) stays shut up about it. Hitoshi... I've never figured out where he stands, but in my fanfiction, no one is really ever "evil", just doing what they think (for whatever reason) is right.

And with the formatting... If it's a problem, I'll try to work on it. It's pretty much always been a stylistic thing for me... there's a lot of internal monologue in my work.

evil_raichu January 29 2008, 19:48:24 UTC

The ending was cuteness!!!