As always, I love the little touches you add to the character's actions to inform their personalities. The things they do with their hands illustrate their states of mind.
The way you flesh out Henry is great, too. He's an actor, yet somehow I never thought about him watching anything. Television and movies are going to be a major part of his life -- they have to be. This is who he is, what he does. For Pepper, whose passions are different, she's flailing a bit in his pop culture world. They have fun together, it is simple, but it is also lacking in intimacy. I'm glad there was more to their relationship not working than just 'He's not Tony' or the creepy impression aspect. Henry doesn't give enough of himself for Pepper's taste. I am sure there are plenty of people out there that would be just fine with the way Henry expresses himself, but Pepper needs someone uncensored. You show the cracks in Pepper/Henry while simultaneously showing a foundation for Pepper/Tony that isn't
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Thank you for the thoughtful comment. I'm so glad you liked it, because of course I wrote it for you so I hoped you would. :) I love Henry so much in the comics, and I really wanted to do justice to the alternate version of him I created here, while still working towards the inevitable ending.
I wrote several drafts of the breakup scene, with Henry showing a pretty diverse range of emotions, but in the end this was how it came out. I was a little worried I wasn't giving him enough time on the page, but the first half of the story was devoted largely to him so I felt like it was all right that Tony's presence dominated this half.
Anyhow! I'm happy you're happy. And I got so excited about all of your prompts in the exchange that I may or may not go back and write the others.
I wish I was reviewing this on my computer and not my phone, because I want to quote everything I loved.
But I suppose that's the whole fic...so probably best.
Anyway. Seriously. This was fantastic. The last line- perfect, and absolutely brought a fantastic image of Pepper to mind, the way she'd say that. Amazing, as always.
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As always, I love the little touches you add to the character's actions to inform their personalities. The things they do with their hands illustrate their states of mind.
The way you flesh out Henry is great, too. He's an actor, yet somehow I never thought about him watching anything. Television and movies are going to be a major part of his life -- they have to be. This is who he is, what he does. For Pepper, whose passions are different, she's flailing a bit in his pop culture world. They have fun together, it is simple, but it is also lacking in intimacy. I'm glad there was more to their relationship not working than just 'He's not Tony' or the creepy impression aspect. Henry doesn't give enough of himself for Pepper's taste. I am sure there are plenty of people out there that would be just fine with the way Henry expresses himself, but Pepper needs someone uncensored. You show the cracks in Pepper/Henry while simultaneously showing a foundation for Pepper/Tony that isn't ( ... )
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I wrote several drafts of the breakup scene, with Henry showing a pretty diverse range of emotions, but in the end this was how it came out. I was a little worried I wasn't giving him enough time on the page, but the first half of the story was devoted largely to him so I felt like it was all right that Tony's presence dominated this half.
Anyhow! I'm happy you're happy. And I got so excited about all of your prompts in the exchange that I may or may not go back and write the others.
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But I suppose that's the whole fic...so probably best.
Anyway. Seriously. This was fantastic. The last line- perfect, and absolutely brought a fantastic image of Pepper to mind, the way she'd say that. Amazing, as always.
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