FIC: "Galatea" (House, PG, Part 2 of 4)

[rj_anderson]

Thanks to some helpful comments from logastellus and others, I ended up reworking a couple of scenes in the last post. You may or may not want to check that out, but in any case here's a link to Part One for those who missed it.

And now, on to Part Two:

Comments

[lydaclunas]

Your link for Part One is messed up. *surfs through old entries to find it*

[rj_anderson]

Even worse, it was nonexistent. Thanks, I've fixed it now.

[lydaclunas]

I'm enjoying this -- though I have this feeling that I need to watch more House, considering I think I've just been spoiled for a few episodes. Heh. :)

Um, yes. Anyhoo. Love the pacing and the dialogue, and the medical stuff holds together really convincingly; well done. And you have two patients, woo. Now I want to know if they're somehow connected...

I suck at feedback these days. gr8 storie keep up the gud werk!!1

[rj_anderson]

Ooer on the spoilers! I forgot you'd just started on the series. But just wait until you get to "Three Stories" near the end of S1 -- it'll blow your socks off. And I don't think I've spoiled that one for you.

Your feedback does not suck, either. At least, not any more than my feedback for other people's stories sucks.

Erm, maybe that's not such a good defense, but anyway...

[pwcorgigirl]

Oh, excellent! Very good characterizations, wonderful snappy dialogue, and you've got two medical mysteries going on.

I love your Cameron, especially her comments in the first chapter about learning to to skeptical without becoming a cynic. You've made her the person I'd really like to see on the show. Chase's mild complaint about "that's not a woman, that's a force of nature" made me smile. He so often takes abuse without complaint that it's good he's not a doormat here.

These three lines are the gourmet chocolate of snark: "You knew I couldn't resist a good kidney failure in the morning."

"You know what I appreciate most about you," said Wilson, "is your delicacy."

"If all you want is a good-looking date, Chase's your man. Though somehow I don't think you're going to be satisfied with a hollow chocolate bunny, but hey, if you want to waste a few months figuring that out, be my guest."

Lovely ending line from Cameron here, with just the right amount of wistfulness.

[rj_anderson]

Oh, thank you! Coming from you, one of my favorite Housefic authors, that means a great deal. I'm very glad to hear that Cameron's characterization works for you -- the writing of her character on the show has been so uneven that she's hard to pin down. And I'm also glad you like the snark. :)

I was concerned a little that this chapter might come across as Chase-bashing (which would be a shame as I actually quite like the guy), so I'm also glad to hear you felt he had at least one positive moment.

Thanks so much for weighing in!

[izhilzha]

Lovely, lovely fic. I've been (finally) catching up on first season, and you're handling the characters as they should be handled: wonderful amounts of snark (especially love your House & Wilson scenes), distinct voices for the characters (more so than the show sometimes gives them), and Cameron as living, breathing, honorable human being.

I'm really enjoying this.

Can't wait for the next installment.

[rj_anderson]

*purrs loudly*

Thank you!

[cesario]

House snorted. "Sure, he responds to stimuli. So do bacteria.

*dies*

everyone looks great here. very in character. and your dialogue is smashing. I await more!

[thelittletwin]

I'm Wahlee's sister, and a huge House fan. This is perfect, and I want more!!! I've been a fan of your writing for a while, and I just can't get over how well you stay true to the characters. Don't keep me waiting! I want more!

[rj_anderson]

Thank you! I'm really glad you're enjoying the story. And I'm working on Part Three as we speak!