Wherein Nai Makes A Decision

[rix_scaedu]

I wrote this to aldersprig's fifth prompt.  It is quite long and I expect there will be at least one more instalment.

It was the robes that set me off on the decision path that led to everything else.  My mother and my sister Ruh were carrying them in from the car.  Brightly coloured responsibility ceremony robes all ready for Ruh’s birthday the next day.

Comments

[kelkyag]

Yup. Not done yet. Moar please?

[rix_scaedu]

Hopefully next week. I've been writing this on my laptop on the train coming home from work.

[kelkyag]

Yaaaaaay!

Ooh.

[anonymous]

I am delighted at the thought that there will likely be more to this.

Re: Ooh.

[rix_scaedu]

I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[zianuray]

“My colour seems to a dull olive sludge.” I gave a barking laugh. “I think I prefer this.”

seems to be

“No. I went to my room cried, locked the door and cried again. My father came and got me.”

either a comma or the word and between room and cried

[rix_scaedu]

Comma inserted.

Not sure why you've mentioned the first sentence, unless you like it. :)

[zianuray]

perhaps: "my color seems to BE a dull olive sludge"

sorry, tired and loopy

[rix_scaedu]

That could be both of us. :)

Fixed.