A Staff With A Knob On It

[rix_scaedu]

I wrote this to kunama_wolf's prompt " Your angels setting. Something involving a round knob-like object and the colour purple." This story is probably some years after The Man With The Bucket.

I would also suggest that this story should be rated Parental Guidance Recommended for adult concepts.“Purple is the magistrates’ colour,” said Ordestia Prima. “It’

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[thnidu]

From the title, I was expecting something a bit bawdier and maybe Discworldish, being reminded of "A Wizard's Staff has a Knob at the End".

• a man and a woman lay impaled into the stone together.
-> on (or) against

[rix_scaedu]

I thought of the Discworld too, I must admit. :)

It does all take place in a temple of the god of carnal love is the best I can offer to bawdiness.

[rix_scaedu]

I am thinking about word choice.

The staff goes through them and into the stone, hence 'into' but that could imply something wider than I have in mind.

I'm not sure your two suggestions have the penetrating implication I'm trying to get at, but I may have to consider whether what I've already said tells the reader that too.

[kelkyag]

The staff goes through them and into the stone

That is sufficiently unexpected (and on reflection I'm surprised that it's obvious without trying to move the bodies) that I suggest making it specific rather than sort of implied in the text. While the later bit with the jump from the ceiling and breaking of the sword suggests an extraordinary attacker, piercing stone is with a stab is, I think, a step up from shattering a metal weapon.

Haigenes has learned a lot since last we saw him. And things seem to be heating up on the Vard front, between this and the possibility of the corrupted choir coming to light ...

[kunama_wolf]

Noticed your tag goes to helgenes, rather than haigenes

Eeee plot advancement! Something has been brewing for a while...

[rix_scaedu]

I have fixed the tag. Helgenes is someone else entirely.

[kiarrith]

oo, interesting.

[rix_scaedu]

Thank you