Co-operation

[rix_scaedu]

This is my response to Day 23 of http://aldersprig.livejournal.com/'s 30 Days of Flash Fiction, the list for which can be found at http://aldersprig.livejournal.com/221684.html?view=1245940#t1245940

They were at the rendezvous before the Terrencians. Somewhere in the distance, Nettlebrake from the direction, there was bombing. The support section

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[aldersprig]

*grins happily* we were talking, today, on our drive home, about killer mums. :-D

[rix_scaedu]

Pleased to have obliged. :)

There was all this banter and conversation in my head for this piece that would have been interesting character development but blown the size way out. As it was I trimmed about 70 words and I think it's better for it.

[aldersprig]

Hee, yeah, I have that happen sometimes.

[lilfluff]

Heh. I love the closing.

[rix_scaedu]

Thank you. The sort of thing you get when two forces co-operate and don't have quite the same assumptions.

A mortar might have been nice too, but I didn't think I could fit it into the sectio or the story :)

[lilfluff]

I suspect soldiers are often thankful for the invention of mortars. At least so long as the enemy forgets to bring theirs.

[rix_scaedu]

With 'wrack' I may have been trying to be clever.
My dictionary includes among the definitions for 'wrack' "wreck or wreckage" and "ruin or destruction; disaster; rack."
I was trying to convey the feeling of one of those French villages on the front lines in WWI - the war has wrecked this place, then come back and rolled in the remains a few times.

[rix_scaedu]

I was writing to a word count here and I may have edited to 'solider' to lose a word...