In Which We Gloss Over Four Weeks And Reach Midsummer

[rix_scaedu]

In response to Anonymous' prompt "More Nai - something surprising (to her?) about her teacher" I have manged to include several things about him that came as a surprise to Nai.

It truly was a night’s journey from Changzhu to Haizhang and we slept in our seats in our compartment.  The morning was being fresh and enthusiastic when we disembarked from

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phrasing nit

[zianuray]

Mother’s favoured purveyor of all sorts of formal robes was an upmarket department store that had outlets in all the major towns in our province. That was not the sort of place. This was really serious clothes shopping for both sexes.

Perhaps: "This was not that sort of place." OR "That was not the sort of place this was."

I love the description of the colors of her robe. Yes, she is far too complex for a simple bi-colored piece!

And it is quite likely the people he was checking for the police would not have expected him to work with the police either, given what we've been told of his past reputation. Good camouflage there!

Re: phrasing nit

[rix_scaedu]

I am thinking that I meant the sentence to be "That was not this sort of place."