The Dark Night

[rivercrossing2]

Prompt: #1: Taub's past suicide attempt.
Words: 3,507
Rating: R; see above and below.
Warning: Graphic desription of suicide attempt by overdose.  
Spoilers: For Season 5 episodes: "Painless" and "Simple Explenation" 
Summary: A week after Kutner's unexpected suicide, Taub meets a clinic teenager in the clinic who oddly reminds him of himself.
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Comments

[yasibaba]

I'm so sorry I put off reading this for so long. I had a million things going on- between family drama and tweaking my own fics, I really haven't had time to sit down and do any reading. This was terrific! You know I love me some Taub ;] It's very Taub-esque, the mood, the writing. It suits him nicely.

" “You mean you stole it?”

“Yup.”

“Cool.” "

Love the dialogue. I'm a huge dialogue-whore, just so you know. I love the gritty realism and just how it flows naturally. I really hate when I'm reading a good fic and the dialogue just doesn't flow, like it seems forced or just...unnatural, you know?

I can't really spot any errors that thelonemascot hasn't already pointed out, and I have to agree with cuddyclothes that the ending wasn't 100 percent believable, but to be honest it doesn't even matter.

Much love <3

[rivercrossing2]

Awww thanks! It really means a lot that you like my dialogue...I take extra, extra care with the dialogue...so thank you! <3 <3 <3

PS: I did rush the ending and that's probably why it's not believable. I just couldn't think of a better way to end it, unfortunately.... :(

No worries about reading it late! I know you've been going through a lot lately and personal responsibilities come first, anyway. :)

[yasibaba]

Dialogue is my best friend. If a fic had super awesome dialogue, but the writing wasn't that great- I'd probably still read. *shrug* I'm just like that.

And it's okay. I know exactly what that's like. I have an itch to go back and edit my first ever fic (I'm noticing things I don't like/want changed now), but I'm just so damn lazy.

[rivercrossing2]

Thanks, and no worries! Glad you liked it! And yeah, I wish they would have Taub interact more with the patients too: especially the young ones (big surprise there). ;) He wants kids so badly and would be so good with them.