♕ Eleventh Exquip [!event: written;recorded]

Mar 02, 2010 22:25

[There are lines from some sort of poem scribbled in the margins of the page. It looks as if it's been scratched out and rewritten several times. It's also looking to be a really terrible poem.]

Your eyes glitter like...diamonds
and the wind flows through your hair like...wind through the branches of a willow tree...

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Ω erza scarlet

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FKJRUIO thetitania March 3 2010, 04:28:30 UTC
[!! Scribbles.]

No one.

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FJKERUIOEJ!! thetitania March 3 2010, 04:31:14 UTC
No one has inspired any words. I've heard writing poetry is....soothing.

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stripallaround March 3 2010, 04:34:22 UTC
[brblaughing]

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thetitania March 3 2010, 04:50:45 UTC
What are you laughing at?

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stripallaround March 3 2010, 04:53:14 UTC
N-Nothing. So, uhm what are you writing?

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thetitania March 3 2010, 05:02:51 UTC
It's...a rough draft. It's not important.

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oh god 1/3 thetitania March 3 2010, 04:57:53 UTC
[There may or may not be a choked noise. It's muffled, so it's hard to tell.]

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2/3 what is this thetitania March 3 2010, 04:59:04 UTC
I've...recently picked up the hobby.

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3/3 I don't even thetitania March 3 2010, 05:00:02 UTC
But the person it's meant for, it's hardly up to standards yet.

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OH HO HO HO HO HO HO HO HO HO sei_what March 3 2010, 05:21:07 UTC
Perhaps try switching diamonds and glitter, and make it a metaphor rather than a simile? Metaphors are more flattering after all. Something along the lines of 'Within your eyes, diamonds glitter'?

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sob thetitania March 3 2010, 05:34:14 UTC
That's a good idea. [a beat.] Thank you.

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What's this? Sei not ribbing the hell out of her for this? It's more likely than you think sei_what March 3 2010, 05:43:38 UTC
Anytime.

More things rhyme with glitter than diamonds anyway.

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I'm sure the ribbing will come later. :| thetitania March 3 2010, 21:03:40 UTC
Yes. That's...true. [so awkward.]

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dominatingsky March 3 2010, 06:17:22 UTC
Try a haiku instead.

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thetitania March 5 2010, 21:51:10 UTC
A haiku...ah, yes. That seems like a good idea. Thank you.

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dominatingsky March 5 2010, 22:56:25 UTC
Yeah. Ya know I should try one myself...

[ffff damn flowers ;;]

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thetitania March 7 2010, 18:50:28 UTC
It seems like a pleasant way to let your feelings be known.

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