Comments | rinalin: Fic: Drabbles

rinalin

Fic: Drabbles

Jan 13, 2006 21:50

In response to my challenge thegranddewru requested 3 drabbles from the song Right Here by StainD. Sadly, I had all three written when my word program decided to shut itself down. And it doesn't recover anything. So I had to rewrite two of these. And they never turn out as good as the first version. *sighs*

More still to come. Perhaps tomorrow though.

( Imperfect - M/I )

fanfic, mal, jayne, w/z, zoe, m/i, jaylee, wash, kaylee, inara, drabbles

Comments 9

aliaspiral January 13 2006, 05:54:31 UTC

*cries all over Jayne and Kaylee*

*cries more just because*

i love that Wash bent to show Zoe how.

*goes back to crying*

thegranddewru January 13 2006, 06:19:04 UTC

fuhsookuhigus! Wow. All of them and the J/K working in that Simon bit... Wash and Zoe that was the part I would probably use too. Man! *Heart breaks* And M/I OUCH.

So good. Jayne! Poor Jayne. Man that ones the best. I can really picture it as a scene in my head. everything else overexposed and slow motion and the Kaylee and Jayne. Separate.

wily_one24 January 13 2006, 12:38:34 UTC

Ye soo... and they call *me* dark.

That wasn't very nice. I mean, sure, I love it and all the imagery within, but... yeesh.

Ow.

kaseitomodatchi January 13 2006, 14:39:39 UTC

So very sad. All of these are really well written, and so very sad. :(

I really like the way that you showed Inara taking all of the emotional beatings from Mal, time after time, and continuing to take them. I get the feeling that she allows him to do it because she loves him and maybe in some twisty way, she knows that he has feelings for her as well and that's why he hurts her so much? Maybe, maybe not, but that was the impression I got from your drabble, and I really liked it.

Aww, and the Zoe/Wash one was depressing yet strangely calming. I liked that River provided a bit of emotional closure to Zoe, very interesting. And I agree with the others; the "He bent to teach you how" line is a very good one. :) Nice job.

Augh, and "This Kinda Life" was such a heartbreaker! I found myself willing Simon to hurry up with the captain and come see to Jayne, I was so desperate for Jayne to live. :( That bit about Simon having to choose one life over another was very powerful, and also very realistic. For some reason, that line about Wash ( ... )

rinalin January 13 2006, 15:12:04 UTC

Your feedback is always the best and makes me all warmy and gushy inside.

*whispers* You should go do the the challenge too.

kaseitomodatchi January 13 2006, 21:22:29 UTC

You mean your writer's block challenge? Oh, I'm aaalll over that. :D

janus_74 January 13 2006, 16:22:49 UTC

"This Kind of Life" made my heart hurt. I felt so helpless reading it. Of course I keep reading it again and again...