Fic 11: Out Here in the Ether

[rgcraeg]

1. I Came Apart Here

Sam fell, hard, her head bouncing like a croquet ball in the grass, a grunt forced from her lungs by the impact. Daniel jerked toward the sound. Alarmed eyes watched for a moment before turning to Jack, as if he'd have the answers. But Jack was already moving, signaling Teal'c to cover the path where the school of Jaffa

Comments

[thothmes]

Welcome back from...out there.

This one was lyrical. I could really feel her world slow from spinning to stillness at the end. Nice.

[rgcraeg]

Haha, out there, it's nice to be back, I wish I could visit more often!

And for some reason I felt like beating the crap out of Carter. I'm glad you could get into it.

[rdamel]

Good story!

Just one small thing you may want to fix--in section 3, you wrote "visual queues" when I think you meant "visual cues".

Melissa M.

[rgcraeg]

Eh, thanks for pointing that out. I passed that about a hundred times and never noticed (obviously).