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Barefoot Day Ten

Aug 26, 2008 20:00

Title: Flight of Fancy
Author: rev02a
Rating: PG
Warnings: Cursing. Kissing.
Disclaimer: Not mine, not mine, not mine.
Prompt: "The last temptation is the greatest treason: to do the right deed for the wrong reason." - T.S. Eliot

All research for this chapter (and, let me tell you e-p-t's in 1970's are pretty interesting) was done at Read more... )

barefootboys, summer 1977

Comments 10

brighty18 August 27 2008, 02:25:06 UTC

OMG! This was the best chapter yet! I loved the juxtaposition of the puppies' tender moment coupled with James bellowing about urine.

“I don’t want to touch it! It’s pee!” James whines.

Sirius’s palms at Remus’s bare chest, tracing down the flow of taunt muscle as if looking for a path on a map.

“It’s your pee, you stupid idiot!”

ha ha ha ha ha ha ha

rev02a August 27 2008, 02:31:47 UTC

Any experience with an ept will lead anyone to squealing about urine. I don't blame the man. Thanks for this, M! I'm glad this is fun.

rhye August 27 2008, 02:38:07 UTC

Um, hello Prongs, trying to make out here! Knock first please! LOL ^_^

rev02a August 27 2008, 02:39:56 UTC

LOL Poor Prongs, when he figured that out he probably dropped the test tube on himself.... AWW! I SHOULD HAVE WRITTEN THAT IN!

werewolfsfan August 27 2008, 03:28:29 UTC

OMG! To have a gorgeous, sensual, tender love scene interspersed with the hysterics about peeing in the cup is evil! And possibly the funniest thing I have ever read in a R/S J/L fic!

rev02a August 27 2008, 11:15:33 UTC

Well, honestly, you know if they're having some hanky panky in a room with three other boys they've done it to a strange soundtrack anyway. I think the pee is probably pretty normal. I mean, they're boys....

wopt70 August 27 2008, 03:30:37 UTC

this is great, just because they can still find romance in this crazy ass scene. i love it. james is a hilarious five-year-old. what a prat

rev02a August 27 2008, 11:16:38 UTC

He is a five-year-old, isn't he? But I love writing him.

roterhimmel August 27 2008, 08:25:10 UTC

Wanted to say I'm loving this. I'm sorry I didn't comment so far but I'm keeping track (of course) and it's brilliant :DD I love it!

one tiny nitpick (sorry if it bothers you, i seem to be doing this too much these days)
They’ve been so distance (because...

distance=distanced? Maybe?

rev02a August 27 2008, 11:18:02 UTC

I'm glad you're liking this!

Maybe it's an idiom, but people can be distant (like emotionally distant) to each other and it be correct. Thanks for the fix, though!