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Jan 19, 2007 18:31

Title: Fix You
Author: tolavieboheme
Written for: firegold
Rating: PG-13
Genre: Angst. Maybe a very small amount of fluff.
Summary: PreRENT, Mark/Roger. Roger runs away from home to Mark. Roger starts cutting and Mark wants to help.
Notes: This took me a while. I've went over it more times than I can count and still don't like it very much. I hope you do ( Read more... )

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Comments 7

firegold January 21 2007, 00:20:51 UTC

Aaw, I loved it! Thank you!

It was great how Mark admitted that he's only 18, he doesn't really know any better how to deal. Also this: obviously not much better than this was great. I love that because Mark really accepts what Roger's doing, but loves him anyway.

Thank you again

(And P.S. I love that song.)

tolavieboheme January 21 2007, 01:20:44 UTC

Very glad you liked it. Writing is completely different when you're doing it for someone, especially since you're pretty much my favorite writer in the fandom. So, yeah, very glad.

starletfallen January 21 2007, 02:49:14 UTC

I... have mixed feelings about this story. On the one hand, I did like how Mark admitted he didn't really know how to deal or anything. There were a good few moments, and going by technical things (spelling, grammar, etc.), it's a well-written fic.

However, my big problem with this story is the cutting. Self-injury is extremely hard to pull off in a way that seems realistic and not... cliched or cheesy. You have to do your research and really know what you're writing about, and even then... I think my biggest problem with this is that the cutting Roger's doing seems... very shallow, very unrooted in any real problem. Just for attention. And while I realize some people do that, I A) don't think that Roger's that type of person, and B) don't like seeing it. It's overused, and rarely used well ( ... )

tolavieboheme January 21 2007, 03:05:31 UTC

Well, the prompt was for him to be a self cutter. I've never cut, so yeah, I wasn't going to be accurate. It's kind of a road block I can't get over without cutting myself and, um.

Also, I did think the last lines made it clear that he didn't stop when Mark started giving him more attention. It was most definitely not my intention to make it come off like it did to you.

starletfallen January 21 2007, 03:07:17 UTC

Well, then, if that was the prompt, you are given much more leniency. ^^ No one can blame you for writing for your prompt.

tolavieboheme January 21 2007, 03:09:10 UTC

Yeah. Also, thanks for the original comment about the story being written well.

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