Comments | renisanz: fic: "With Kid Gloves" . PG . team sga au fic

renisanz

fic: "With Kid Gloves" . PG . team sga au fic

May 04, 2009 23:20

Title: "With Kid Gloves"
Author: renisanz
Summary: From ozsaur : Daycare Center AU - Three of the team run a daycare center. The fourth wants to enroll his or her young child.
Category: Team/Gen
Rating: PG
Word count: 2,955
Warning/Spoilers: There's vomit.
Disclaimer: I don't own these characters.
Notes: Written for team_sga AU Fest 2009. This is sort ( Read more... )

character: john sheppard, character: ronon dex, fandom: sga, challenge, character: rodney mckay, character: amelia banks, fan: fic, character: teyla emmagan

Comments 16

tielan May 5 2009, 08:39:02 UTC

*g*

It worked out great. I love the little changes you made - they tighten the scenes up excellently!

And children throwing up on Rodney's shoes will never grow old... :D

renisanz May 5 2009, 14:49:19 UTC

Really? Thanks so much. :D I can't remember what at what point the story was when I sent it to you. And you know, they still have that field trip at the end of the week. ;)

julii_wolfe May 5 2009, 19:17:05 UTC

oh John, always so awkward, always unsure of your place. this was great, I love how you worked everyone into it, and even managed to get some sexual tension between Ronon and Amelia in about 6 lines.

Now that is working your word count.
Great fic!

renisanz May 5 2009, 20:05:48 UTC

I'm so glad you liked how I portrayed John. I find him such a challenge to write. Ronon and Amelia...I couldn't resist. :)

michelel72 May 6 2009, 00:02:43 UTC

This is strangely plausible. The idea of Rodney with the infants kind of breaks my brain, but I love his learning tapes (and his boxers!). And I can totally see Ronon being a jungle gym, basically.

renisanz May 6 2009, 04:47:19 UTC

The idea of Rodney with the infants kind of breaks my brain...

I thought it was a fun idea. I figure he'd be cool with kids as long as they couldn't talk. Maybe he reasons that by getting them the right foundation they won't grow up to be so annoying...? LOL.

live_brave May 6 2009, 00:45:32 UTC

This is terrific! I love that Rodney is in his element with the kids and doesn't do well with "big people", and that Ronon works with the little kids in the gym. This is just so fun and sweet, and who doesn't love awkward John? *g*

renisanz May 6 2009, 05:03:11 UTC

Thank you. :)

I'm glad you liked how I portrayed Rodney, and John especially. It was hard striking the right balance with him.

ozsaur May 6 2009, 10:21:37 UTC

Adorable! I love Rodney being good with little people, but not with big people. And that moment with Amelia and Ronon was nicely done. Enjoyed the story very much!

renisanz May 6 2009, 16:24:52 UTC

Thank you. It was a cool prompt. :)