fic: "Side by Side, They Both Get Bright" [1/1] G

[renisanz]

Title: "Side by Side, They Both Get Bright"
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Comments

[sezjara]

This was nice.

I can actually see this happening, just as it did.

I like that you included Kate, and that she was the one to suggest it to Teyla. Makes it really personal for her.

She smiled slightly and it was like sunlight breaking through the clouds on a gloomy day.

Nice imagery.

He was still trying to wrapped his mind around this very strange revelation. But then, he was in another galaxy involved in a war against space vampires and sentient, computerized bugs that had taken the form of humans, so, strange was a relative term.

LOL. I like this one, too!

"Ronon and Rodney cannot know about this.”

Blackmail materials. They just wouldn't understand, would they?

Good job. You seem to be very good at writing a quick one-shot. Much better than I am at this point. :)

[renisanz]

Oh, yay. I'm glad someone finally commented. I was beginng to worry this was a little too crazy. ;)

You seem to be very good at writing a quick one-shot. Much better than I am at this point. :)

Thanks. I must admit, it takes lots of practice. The more you write, the better you get. I really struggled to make this short, though, as it was meant to fit in a comment, but I was still 200 characters over.

[sezjara]

Well, you did a good job, either way. I guess it just goes to show that you like to write. :)

[2bluaeryn]

Excellent. Love the feeling behind this piece...it eludes *calm*.

Thanks for sharing.

[renisanz]

Thank you for reading. :) Glad you enjoyed it.

[azure_horizon]

"Rodney can Ronon cannot know about this."

!!!

Lol. Cute. Very nice; I thought it was going to have something to do with beba because when I read that prompt, it's what I thought of so I'm glad this is a nice wee departure from my thoughts.

Thanks for writing!

[renisanz]

Thank you. :)

This is actually a prompt I suggested. I didn't plan on writing anything for it, but looking through the prompt list, I came across it again, and something clicked. Glad to have surprised you. :)

[tielan]

Oh, so sweet! You've woven the attraction between them into the story in a really beautiful manner - not overdone or anything!

And I love that John is all "Rodney and Ronon don't need to know about this!"

[renisanz]

Oh, thanks so much for the encouragement. I was really worried to write this from John's POV, so it's a relief that it reads ok.

And of course John had to add that caveat, or else he'd be teased forever. :)

[skywardprodigal]

This is awesome.

Do you permit archiving off lj? I'd like to host it, if so.

It's such a fun, quiet, piece. And it's utterly unexpected and very charming. I'm delighted.

[renisanz]

Thank you. :) I'm glad you enjoyed those aspects of the story. :)

[skywardprodigal]

I thoroughly did! And, the crayons aspect (being soothing and fun) came up in a story about this beautiful flight attendant by the name of Jewel Van Valin.

[renisanz]

Thanks for the link. That was a very interesting article. At a restaurant called Macaroni Grill, they have paper covering the tables, and i always have fun coloring while waiting for my food.