★ House: Lost (The Gasping For Air Remix)

[remixabot]

★ [ Gregory House | PG | 100 words ]
If pain were an ocean, this would be the Pacific.

Original story: Lost by dreams_power, 311 words.
Remix author: theswearingkind

Comments

[dreams_power]

Yowch.

And yay!

I can just see this:
Later, he will berate her for this decision that was not hers to make, curse a God he does not believe in, damn all modern medicine in its pathetic, shoddy glory, but now he can only think: if I scream, they will make it stop, and so he screams.

[theswearingkind]

thanks! i'm so glad that you liked it. i was worried.

[dreams_power]

You didn't have to be ^.^

[trascendenza]

...and that is not a metaphor.
God, that is *such* a House line! Also, I love this: curse a God he does not believe in,

You really brought me right into this moment with him. Visceral.

[theswearingkind]

thanks! i'm glad you liked the that is not a metaphor part, because i was really proud of that.

this was fun. let's do it again, soon.

[melodyunity]

Oh. Wow, that's great -- so short and simple, and so very evocative. Just. Yeah.

Favorite lines:
and that is not a metaphor

and
if I scream, they will make it stop, and so he screams.

[theswearingkind]

thanks! i'm glad you liked it.

[astrogirl2]

Wow. This is really good. Packs an incredible punch into a tiny amount of space, and every word of it feels exactly right.

[theswearingkind]

I...just found this comment. Wow. Sorry about that.

Thanks for the review! I'm glad you enjoyed reading this, lo those many months ago. ;)