fic: Closet (Looking Through You Remix) (SGA, John/Rodney/Ronon/Teyla, NC-17)

[jammasterjayne]

Title: Closet (Looking Through You Remix)
Author: helens78Summary: Ronon and Teyla are beautiful together, and still Rodney doesn't want to be here

Comments

[panisdead]

Oh man, this is really cool. What John wants, what Rodney is able and, more importantly, willing to give him, the uncomfortable parallels between Ronon and Teyla and their easy dynamic--I really enjoyed it. It's a very interesting story, and I mean that in the best possible way.

I like the way it works as a remix as well. Not so much the same events as the same tone, the same anger and frustration underlying both scenarios.

I think my favorite part is that moment of eye contact between John and Ronon when it becomes clear that though there's an underlying competitiveness on John's part at least, Ronon is also providing a warning--don't push him too far, Sheppard. Very cool.

Thanks so much! Definitely worth the wait.

[helsmeta]

Thank YOU for letting me play with your work! I had so much fun writing this, and you were spot-on in all the things you said -- picking out Ronon's warning, the parallels, trying to recapture your tone in different circumstances.

(Also I cannot believe I missed responding to your feedback when replying, so I am so, so glad I came back to double-check! So much sorry!!)

[helsmeta]

Thank you! I'd like to think they will, too. They may be terrible at communicating, but I think it's something that can be muddled through. ^_^

[almostnever]

The way Rodney's conflicted about what's going on here, and the way John wants it enough to drive ahead anyway, makes the scene that much hotter. And the drama between them is heightened by the counterpoint of the pleasure and closeness between Ronon and Teyla.

I wish I knew what Rodney was trying to say with his refrains of "I can't" but at the same time, John clearly hasn't figured that out yet, so it makes sense for the reader to be not quite sure, too.

Enjoyed this a lot, thank you.

[helsmeta]

<3 Thank you! Poor Ronon and Teyla -- I think they both want Rodney to be happy so much. But Rodney's total inability to communicate what he wants (of which the "I can't" refrain is one piece out of many) is not helping matters at all.

[darsynia]

This story is very hot, but it also hit me in places that made me think, and I actually had to go off for a day and come back, to review it! I think part of it is because I can get very emotionally attached to characters in stories, and here, I think I latched onto Rodney, so when he left, I had to, too.

In any case, I really liked the expanding images from the original, particularly the outfit Teyla has on, and the closeness of the events compared to how I perceived them at first. It's very John, too, and I simply adore (though it hurts!) what Rodney says as he leaves, because it's true, he's not the type to accept being steamrolled, far from it. Great remix!

[helsmeta]

Thanks so much! You're exactly right -- Rodney does not want to get pushed into this, and even if he does like it, he's not happy about not getting the choice, not getting more say in it. I'd like to think he and John will eventually sort through that, but it's going to be a bumpy road, that's for sure.

[helsmeta]

Thank you so much! <3 I'm really, really happy with the way this turned out -- the inspiration to play against type was very welcome and I felt really good about where it took me. Not that I want the boys to be unhappy -- but I like seeing what happens when things don't go as expected, both in the meta sense of not following fanon and in the more direct sense of John fucking up (and Rodney failing to communicate clearly until after the scene). :)