Stability, Safety, and Happiness by Lavinia Lavender

[lavinialavender]

Title: Stability, Safety, and Happiness
Author: Lavinia Lavender
Summary: It was the insensible force of adolescent attraction, but it was strong and consuming and had carried them on for how many months now? (Lily/Severus, Lily/James, Remus' POV)
Rating: PG-13 (tiny bit of language)
Warnings: none but what we know happens in canon
Word Count: 1,738

Comments

[lady_bracknell]

I really liked this.

I thought you really captured Remus, that sense of him as observer of people, how he's there for people without being at all cloying - how he doesn't judge Lily, even though he's not sure that what she's doing is good for her, he just asks the right questions so she can decide for herself. I thought that was a lot more effective than a big brawl on the subject.

I thought the part about James was well-observed, too, how it's not about highs and lows with him, but constancy, which strikes me as very true to them. I always picture James as really settling down, and that was a nice contrast with the relationship with Severus, even though we didn't see that.

Nicely done :).

[lavinialavender]

Thanks so much for reviewing, and I'm really happy you liked it.

I still consider Remus a little difficult to write, so I'm glad you think I got him well. And yes, James - I like the surface contrast between him and Severus, but who really ended up being safer.

Thanks again!

[bratanimus]

Ooo, very nice, very nice! I really like this.

I thought your description of Addict!Lily and Drug!Snape were fabulous: Remus had seen her in odd, brief moments before, when she got back from meeting Snape; when she was wildly giddy, her eyes brighter than he had ever seen and her cheeks either pale or flushed. She had been unable to stop moving, whirling around and talking of such outlandish things, and overall acting so un-Lily-like that Remus had finally asked if there was a misunderstanding, and Severus Snape was actually a code name for an illicit drug. Lily had laughed and laughed in a way that wasn’t entirely reassuring.

Also loved Lily didn’t see herself as so cataclysmic; Remus wondered if, and rather hoped at times he was the only one who did.

And this: ... he wondered if it could have worked at all, if it could have changed things - wizarding world be damned, if she could have been alive today.I thought both Lily and Remus in this were lovely. Such tenderness from him towards her. Such vibrance in her. Really

[lavinialavender]

Thanks so much!

Yay, thanks for the specific quotes you liked - you clearly know how authors love those, heh. It's especially gratifying to know one's last line was effective.

Thanks again!

[shimotsuki]

You paint the different emotions very vividly here -- Lily's giddiness in the past, and her bitterness and despair now, as well as Remus's confusion over how she could've found herself attracted to Snape. Lily had laughed and laughed in a way that wasn’t entirely reassuring -- that's a great line. I really liked the image of Remus being there for her, too, a steady friend, trying to help her understand what it is that she needs to do.

And the twist at the end -- where Remus is thinking that maybe Snape would have been safer for Lily than James, after all -- that really makes an impact. Nice work!

[lavinialavender]

Thanks so much for your detailed review, I love hearing what readers liked. Yay especially for impact! :D