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The Burning Wheel

May 28, 2005 22:35

Title: The Burning Wheel
Author: FlocksOfTurtles / eryn_
Pairing: none (Lucius/Narcissa implied)
Genre: general
Audience: [Almost Anyone]
Warnings: none, but discusses other religious beliefs.
Length: 885 words
Complete?: yes.
Beta-ed? : no.
Summary: "How do the Malfoys spend the holidays?"

( The Burning Wheel )

lm/nm, eryn_, almost anyone, no pairing

Comments 5

dream_labyrinth May 29 2005, 11:37:36 UTC

That was very interesting.
I have to admit my knowledge of the holidays mentioned is barely existing, so I can't say much about that part of the story.

But I liked Narcissa's view on Hogwarts life and the mixing of purebloods with Muggle-borns, her disliking it not because of some feeling of superiority and racism but because of fear that it will spoil her son for what his duties are.

In the last paragraph, I was a bit confused about the timeline.
The start sounds like he told them about Hermione in a letter, as you mentioned the letter in the paragraph before it, but then the last sentence show that Draco's home.
Maybe it could work better if you say something like "When Draco came home for the holidays, he told them..."

eryn_ May 29 2005, 17:16:37 UTC

Er... the letter was about the Halloween thing. You're right that the fact that he went home to tell them about the Yule comments was unspecified.

eryn_ May 29 2005, 17:45:54 UTC

And thanks for your comments. I didn't know most of that stuff about the holidays before I looked it up. It was a case of being offered "How do the Malfoys spend their holidays?" and asking myself what kind of religion are they likely to have? (Because I can tell you from personal experience that atheists don't really have holidays.)

tesseract_5 June 1 2005, 02:40:28 UTC

eryn_ just commenting to say I read and really enjoyed this story. I love the concept of the Pureblooded families carrying on the old traditional ways, and being so contemptuous of Muggleborns like Granger. It gives their snobbishnesh so much meaning, instead of just being plain prejudice. I'll come back and read it again so I can comment with some useful con crit, when I'm not brain fogged from too much driving yesterday.

eryn_ June 1 2005, 02:42:25 UTC

Cool, thanks!