FIC: Greyscale (Pockyverse)

[realnobiki]

And now for something completely different... okay, not completely, but it IS a little different. For something that's supposedly about how two horny teenagers get together and become best buds, there's not a whole lot of smex going on...

Title: Greyscale
Fandom: Naruto
Characters: Genma, Raido and a bunch of OCs
Genre: Mood-fic with some

Comments

[drelfina]

EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEe!!!

love love !!!

Rai and Gen and everyone and grit and grey and!!!!!!!!

*incoherent*

[realnobiki]

wow, i thought you of all people wouldn't like it because, well, not much pron and NO iruka *grin*

you made my day! (ok, night, but i've been working on this for 2 days...)

[drelfina]

I LOVE Gen. O.o

Iru's a nine year old... so. he can't be here, yes?

But it's gooood!

And if it's well written, I don't CARE who's in it.

Unless it's a dead person.

Who's like a zombie.

Then... ew.

[meriness]

AMAAAAAAZING! You wrote them beautifully! loved it. loved the love, mush and everything else.

[realnobiki]

thanks so much, always love to know somebody besides my gang of 4 likes this stuff.

but don't say 'love', they hate that (right now anyway - it will take a long time for that word to be used) *giggle* (makes you kinda want to slap silly obtuse war-torn boys...)

[llyoung]

I should have told you a long time ago how much I love your stories and your writing. I enjoy reading your Gen/Rai/Gen (with or without Iruka) stories very much. This story was interesting and fun to read and I hope that you write more in this universe soon.

[realnobiki]

so glad you like it, don't worry, i can't stop writing this stuff. i'm only half-way through the main story, and my brain is already flooded with sequels, fillers, off-shoots, etc.

and then people toss other stuff at me, and i have to go do those too...

[realnobiki]

do you even HAVE an OTP? (if you say sasu/naru, i might have to beat you...)

i'm starting to understand why ninja retire in their 30s - given the history, when the naruto series begins, raido had been a ninja for over 20 years. that's a LOOONG time to be killing people...

go back to sleep, you lazy ****! i'm trying to watch shippuden eps, and i can only watch half before connection dies on me *grumble*

[nezumiko]

I really enjoyed the writing. You've put a lot of thought into making the world real and believable. I loved the accessory characters, the boredom and tedium that undoubtedly typifies many missions, and the urgent roughness of the relationship that slowly develops into something more.

I was a little thrown by the formatting. The places you put estra line breaks seemed odd to me. BUt that is just a minor nitpick.

On the whole, strong writing. Nice work. Thanks.

[realnobiki]

glad you liked it, and yeah, i imagine some of those missions are probably intensely boring - typical military, hurry up and wait. *grin*

the line breaks are accidental, but when i tried taking them out, but it was too hard to tell where the paragraphs began/ended. apparently the LJ editor adds line breaks even without html (i write in html - makes it easier) so when i space paras apart so I can read it, it adds line breaks. *shrug* hope it's not too bad, and old people like me do find it easier to read *grinx2*

[nezumiko]

Oh are you an old person, too? I'm one of the ancient ones on this com who did the whole 80's fashion scene the first time around, and am tinking I still have some of those big geometrical earrings and heavy-duty shoulder pads in a box somewhere. *Grin*

Old fans of the adult jounin REPRESENT, yo!

Maybe it just formatted weirdly where I read it, but sometimes there were extra breaks between paragraphs when the paragraphs really did seem to be part of the same scene. Those were the ones that I found odd.

Anyway...

Yeah, still a great story.