Speak now or forever hold your peace....

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Final revision (I hope

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[i_wear_wellies]

"Tony was the smartest kid in our grade, but he was also a good person"

Try changing "but" to "and". It kind of sounds like you're saying smart people can't be good people. Which I know is not what you mean, but it could be read that way. That's all I can think of right now.