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[readingredhead]

--more ID terms for Russian history
--pgs. 277-364 in Russian history reader
--read chapter 11 of Russian history textbook
--re-read Danica's short story and type up critique
--re-read Sonja's short story and type up critique
--finish writing tutor application
--choose short story #2 to submit for Clarion
--edit "Cold War, Cold World"
--submit Clarion

Comments

[pippins_smile]

I can read!

But oooh guess what? I saw Mr. Krucli at Target today! :D

[readingredhead]

Hah, a Krucli sighting! That man is crazy awesome and I'm stealing him to teach my children.

I'll e-mail you the story then (I'm assuming that's what the assertion of your literacy was about - if it's just a celebration of your abilities, feel free to ignore the e-mailed story). :D

[pippins_smile]

Hahahahaha, it was asking to read it, as WELL as a celebration. You know, literacy is a pretty awesome ability.... :D

[readingredhead]

I used to have a Paul Frank shirt that said "GO READ A BOOK" on the back in large letters, and the front said, "if you're illiterate, you can't read this!" It was the greatest thing ever...I wonder what happened to it, come to think of it...

Thanks for reading the story!

Rewritten?

[ext_37496]

Well, cool, glad you decided. If it's changed significantly I'd be happy to read the new version and comment. (Seriously, it's an excuse not to study for math.)

Ten-second title suggestion: "Outside Influence" (or "Influences"). Think about it BEFORE reading my reasoning, because obviously the title has to stand on its own.

Reason (highlight to see): the reason a cold war erupts into hot war is when something from outside triggers a change, in this case the new chemical, and then the traitor Tanaka is an outside influence on/for the Western allies. (spoilers end here)

Another title: "Unforeseen Consequences" (or "Unintended"). This one has the problem of not being what the story's about, though.

OK, yeah, send me the new version if you want me to read it.

~ Jordy

Re: Rewritten?

[ext_37496]

Shoot, the info hiding didn't work as well as planned. Why does your text color have to be dark grey instead of black?

Ah well...

Re: Rewritten?

[readingredhead]

Hah, don't worry -- I get e-mail notification of new comments and in my e-mail the black-on-black thing worked nicely. :) I'm not completely sure what I think of "Outside Influence" but it's better than what's there at present!

I haven't really revised it much (definitely not enough to justify your reading it again). I'm going to go back through the comments you made and rework a few things though before I send it out to anyone else. If something big or exciting happens to it I'll let you know!

[spadleader88]

i wish i could help but i'm swamped..

but i will say that i think you and your stories are all amazing, and i love ya tons. good luck with everrrything! :)

[readingredhead]

Aw don't worry, I understand that everyone else is as busy as I am. If someone asked me to read a short story for them right now I'm not sure I'd have the time! Thanks as usual though for the encouragement -- it's nice to be reminded that I have a loyal readership :p