His Father's Wand

[readerravenclaw]

My first one-shot, my first timed writing session, my first attempt at writing something in one sitting, my first time writing something in present tense, my first attempt at writing something straight through without going back and editing throughout

Comments

[conuly]

No, it's perfect. Though his grandmother never seemed the hugging type to me - even under duress.

[readerravenclaw]

Thanks for the feedback. :) His grandmother definitely isn't the hugging type - but I think that under exteme duress, is does feel right for her to give him a hug. Just a different take on the character, I suppose. :)

[gryfny]

It's a good ending but it does seem that the story is missing something, since you put into the story a kind of foreshadowing about Neville being able to be almost invisable sometimes and it doesn't seem that it was really resolved. Unless it is a kind of one-shot which is part of a universe kind a thing with a story about Neville and his almost invisable tendencies sometimes.

[readerravenclaw]

What I meant to hint at is that perhaps Neville managed to escape from Bellatrix and the other Deatheaters by performing a bit of wandless magic, and thus concealing himself, hiding himself, and as a result of this trauma, throughout his childhood, whenever frightened, this is the outlet that his magic tended to take - concealment. It's just a supposition, and the story isn't really meant to explore the theory in great detail.