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May 04, 2010 13:20

Title: Aya (Part III)
Author: Raya
Theme: TBD
Genre: General/ Drama
Version: Manga (Crystal Tokyo, Koi no Senshi 'verse)
Rating: PG
Word Count: TBD

Disclaimer: Lady/ChibiUsa and Diana were created by Takeuchi Naoko. I am merely giving Lady flashbacks that that lovely lady would not recognize.

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crystal tokyo, aya, kns

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raya_light May 5 2010, 16:45:55 UTC

^-^ See, that's what I get for not polishing as I type. That is fairly raw product above, hahaha. Not entirely raw. I don't think I can write entirely raw even when ordered to do so on a timed test, but it was certainly rawer (is that a word? hahaha) than what I normally leave in here.

Thanks so much! I knew there was a lot of word and phrase repitition. I was so focused on trying to finish that I just couldn't come up with alternatives. These will definitely help!

raya_light May 5 2010, 17:57:04 UTC

There. Polished what I had a bit. Darn keyboard. I was just about done when I went to shake the crumbs out of it and dropped it. Somehow, it found the magical combination to reset everything back to what I had yesterday! At least it didn't delete anything.

So, anyway, that means I had to do this editing twice, so I didn't get to finish the story after all. Oh well. Maybe next week. I should work through lunch tomorrow since I have to take off early for a dentist appointment, and Friday I have an exercise class at lunch. *grin* Maybe I can come up with some way to end it in that time, hahaha.

sheankelor May 6 2010, 02:04:30 UTC

^-^ .... you and this story.... tell me when it is done and I can read it from start to finish. That way I know who I am lookin' at and what I can expect. I was hoping for a group of lions even though you noted Crystal Tokyo. ^-^

raya_light May 6 2010, 17:37:39 UTC

Now, we're done with lions for the moment (read: year, probably). We have to go visit crones and eagles and who knows what else now. I keep thinking Kethry's beings of light for the Himilayas, but that won't work. Hmmm... Maybe I should check Hindi mythology, though I don't think it really applies there. Though, they do border India and China... Maybe it would! Haha, a peacock in the snow? A white tiger?

Finished this one off and polished off the first part a little more. Any critiques other than it isn't done? ^-^