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Jul 12, 2009 21:52

Not quite the way I envisioned it. Think I'll let it rest and come back to it later. Any suggestions for improvement ( Read more... )

forever young, minako, artemis

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sheankelor July 16 2009, 01:42:35 UTC
None... but who is going to pay her for this job? ^-^ There is still a tent to buy.

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raya_light July 16 2009, 02:56:41 UTC
Hmm... Doesn't seem bare skeleton in the last third or so to you? It flows pretty well and doesn't jump too much? Her emotions and reactions are in line with the time frame and situation? Seems like I keep pushing her to be more melancholy about it and she doesn't act that way.

I think I'm going to take the Forever Young speculation out and put it in a prequel to the tent collapse. It just seems to be out of place, though it explains why she's there.

*smile* Oh, you'll see... I told you she was trying to take over the month. She's claimed Dynamite, Far Away, and Masquerade now, too.

Don't know how much time I'll have to write this weekend. Going to Eden for J's grandmother's birthday party tomorrow, maybe bike riding on Friday, J on Saturday?, and a choir party on Sunday. Busy, busy, busy. And now, it's time for bed.

^-^ Pretty holic butterflies, dear. Reminds me I need to work on that one.

Oyasumi!

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seniumboy July 20 2009, 09:48:45 UTC
I demand to read more! o_o

I was wondering about this and the tent story - why is Minako in a tent? I'm guessing there are other parts I haven't read yet, and I don't recall Forever Young. But you guys have so many series I forget what's what or who wrote what. I'll hunt for the others later on, I think I'll need the background info to understand this story more.

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raya_light July 20 2009, 12:54:09 UTC
*smile* Minako is in a tent because no one would expect to find her in one. That, and Haruka and Michiru are currently camping across the US to lay low for a while and they offered to let Minako join them. Officially, she's supposed to be helping keep Haruka out of the limelight (too many racing opportunities), but unofficially it's just to help Minako get her feet back under her.

There are no other parts for Minako's view of Forever Young. Just what's in my head to be written for this month. Gomen. ^-^ The basis for the story, though, is that paragraph about ChibiUsa still being a newborn after twelve years. Does that ring any bells?

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raya_light July 28 2009, 21:00:20 UTC
Thank you! Thank you for such a well thought out review, and thank you for your kind words.

Hmmm... You might be right about the flow in that sequence. I'll have to play with it. ^-^

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minako98 August 14 2009, 19:15:50 UTC
Like the story. This part sums it up nicely. "Minako nodded slowly. It felt right. It gave her a purpose again. And, it would put her in a position to know the people who would one day threaten her world."

Minako found her place once more as superhero.

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