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sheankelor in rayas_and_rees

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Aug 03, 2008 15:13

It is over.... it is done.... The story that started it all has finally been written ( Read more... )

jul'08, dream castle, if only

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raya_light August 4 2008, 02:57:22 UTC

Yay!

Oyasumi! *laughs her way up the stairs*

sheankelor August 5 2008, 00:01:04 UTC

Is that a good laughter? Or one that means that you'll tell me everything I did wrong later?

seniumboy August 10 2008, 01:07:58 UTC

I don't believe this is the ending *unleashes several plot bunnies*

For one thing, Ian doesn't remember anything about his past yet, and shouldn't he have had dreams too? Has he met Rini? Will he find out Serena is Sailor Moon?

Also, Serena needs to know she was dating her dad, and Mina has to be the one who finds that out first XD

But seriously, this was a good, well thought out series, rich with originality. You did a good job here and it shows.

sheankelor August 10 2008, 03:08:34 UTC

Of course it isn't over, but I had to stop, school started. I'll fill those gaps sometime.

Thank you for the good job, this took far to long, it was only to be three stories long.

seniumboy August 10 2008, 04:49:16 UTC

How has school been going for you? I forgot you even started already...isn't awfully early for students to be returning to classes though? When I was in high school we started by the end of the month.

sheankelor August 10 2008, 12:20:52 UTC

Hetic... frustrating, and the kids aren't even back yet. Well at least my students aren't.

alizep November 12 2008, 03:31:30 UTC

I like the reunion in that everyone ends up as they were meant to be. It seems like it might be a little rushed though. I know that Darien has had the time to realize his dreams, but it seems like he jumped into this too quickly - maybe it's that he was too accepting. I would have been more satisfied if Maritza had explained some of their past to them them, how they met and couldn't be together.

Overall I did like this ending though. I would be interested to see how you are able to address the issue of Serena dating her father. (even though technically he's not her father anymore....)

sheankelor November 12 2008, 04:10:00 UTC

^-^ Rushed because I was just starting back to school. I wasn't even sure if I was going to be able to write it. But thanks for pointing out that it was. (no one else did, and I thought it might be)

Maybe I should put a bit more time in there... or have her explain to him later. *thoughts brew in the back of head*. Yes, I think she will have to. And I can get away with right now Darien just bidding his time and not letting her escape. I'll work on it. But I know I can't make any changes here until voting is done, so it might be in a different story. Shall I let you know through this comment when I add to the story?

alizep November 12 2008, 16:11:57 UTC

Please do! I'd love to read the update/new edition. I think I like your idea that they don't quite end up together as Darien absorbs everything that happened - as long as he still harbors his feelings for her, I wouldn't want to change that. I guess it's one thing to dream that you're in love with someone and another to realize that the dream is real.

Good luck in the voting round!