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May 13, 2006 18:33

Title: It all started with tea ( Read more... )

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Interesting Trigger raya_light May 21 2006, 03:03:45 UTC

t_t Poor Queens... I assume this is before Promethea accepts mecahnization? It would almost be nice to see Esmeraude and Maetel playing quietly in the background, although they are not needed. Of course, if they were there, they could remind Cosmos of Lady or Rei and Minako...

Re: Interesting Trigger sheankelor May 21 2006, 04:01:45 UTC

Thanks. You know this one was yelling at me to go make some revisions. "I need fleshing out!! Promethea needs to seem more like a person. There needs to be more build up to finding out that Cosmos is alone." So expect a re-write sometime.
Also if you ready the version it says PRE- galaxy express. GE999 is when you find out she is mechanized. At least until he brought out Mateal Legends- and that was techniqually the begining of GE999. ( slips of to the green mist to avoid rosy-red balls being thrown)

Re: Interesting Trigger raya_light May 21 2006, 20:00:50 UTC

No rosy mist balls, red, pink, or otherwise. Unless you were wanting to play dodgeball? Then we should take it to EKMC and wake everyone up, hahaha...

Well, like you said, Maetel Legend was the beginning of GE999, and thus pre-GE999 (at least in my mind). By the time GE999 started, she had already been mechanized for a long time. So there. ;P So, it is pre-Maetel Legend (although it is dangerous to try and fit a timescheme to anything Leiji-sensei does, you know...)

Oh, and where are they sitting? In GE999? On an orbiting satellite? How did Cosmos get there if not on the 999? (Just curious on that last one. Don't really need to include an explanation in the story unless it's an easy one like a space station between flights or something).

I am waiting for something to inspire you with Harlock or Emeraldas, hahaha...

Re: Interesting Trigger sheankelor May 21 2006, 21:48:55 UTC

Help!!!!! Harlock was insitant that he could do the Savior topic just fine. But I'm not so sure Usagi would allow that. ( Image of space pirate robbing ships to protect others...)

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Edit of 5/24 raya_light May 25 2006, 17:02:51 UTC

Nice additions. It fills out some of the bare spots without bogging down the story. I saw a couple of sentences I would tweak myself for clarification, but overall pretty good!