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[sheankelor]

The stage is finally set. Now I can happily write the hard one. The one that actually started this twist. So, unless something happens, the next one will be Darian and Maritza getting together

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[seniumboy]

*nods* I can't help but like Raye when its you writing her. I like the tension in this piece, very much. It's a good spin on Raye, and makes one wonder how she can be a senshi with such a shitty life style. Also makes me wonder if her father the politican has a opinion or two about the senshi whenever they make the news. The subplot that hints on Ian is also interesting. I'm curious where that will go.

You really do a good job of writing the girls in this series. Their characters and voices come off as very authentic.

[sheankelor]

Thanks about the writing of the girls. I think they are all based off of my students. As to were it will go... It will go to Usa having someone else when Mamoru switches people. Then we still have a happy Serena which = Happy Raya and Ree ^-^ That is what I meant be "stage being set" I finally have all the characters introduced.

And I'm glad you like my Rei. As to her Dad's opinion... he is being very quiet about it right now.

[raya_light]

Nice. I think Raye would be a little more formal with her mother in public, especially when she says goodbye, but nice overall.

Hmmm... What kind/level of politician is her father? High enough to have security on his family? *snickers at the thought of the senshi having to dodge June's bodyguard*

Token typo: Ian's watching you...

Can't wait for the Darian/Maritza Usagi/Ian tale!

[raya_light]

Hmm... I have a couple of minutes...

She grinned at the shocked look that her barely hide as Serena thanked him <- I think you'll see the problems. ^-^

Oh, and her mother should say "Your father and I" not "Your dad and I". Proper formality thing again, right?

Now, off to ride my bike, make dinner, and see what I can do before J comes over. Ja ne!