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[sheankelor]

Title: Going through the motions
Author: Ree
Theme: Favorite Character - Beryl- copycat
Genre: General
Version: Anime/ Manga - Fates/Tainted Gifts storyline- Silver Mellinium
Rating: G

Most of these characters belong to Takeuchi Naoko. I just borrowed my daughters paper dolls again.

Comments

[raya_light]

something in the priest's tone...

Missing a space in the last "paragraph".

Hmmm... Could she have vowed/promised something that would come back to haunt her? Something that would bind her to the Earth and force her rebirth? Something insidious that would hamper her that the priest sneakily slipped in? *goes away thinking of possible plot twists*

[sheankelor]

I was thinking along those lines, but I couldn't come up with a good wording. If you do, let me know. ^-^

[seniumboy]

I like how you handle this. Only things missing were the music (did that have the kind of thing when ever someone was crowned?) and what the crown looks like. It's funny to read how she's not even paying attention to what she's saying, it shows how far gone she's gotten, though I would also throw in some focus on where her prince could be.

[sheankelor]

Music - check
Prince thoughts - check

Okay I need to add those in. You are right, they are needed. *slight whiny tone* Do I have to describe the crown? *giggles as she knows the answer*