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[sheankelor]

Title: No mercy
Author: Ree
Theme: Favorite Character - Beryl- Mercy
Genre: Darkish
Version: Anime/ Manga - Fates/Tainted Gifts storyline- Silver Mellinium
Rating: G

Most of these characters belong to Takeuchi Naoko. I just borrowed my daughters paper dolls again.

Comments

[raya_light]

the ones, wrapped..., who would never...

Beryl tried to hide the spurt of greedy desire, not suppress it.

Metallia is so deliciously unseliegh here... Could be more, maybe, but it is enough on the first two reads. *smile*

[sheankelor]

Very unseliegh here. I don't wish to make it much more.

[seniumboy]

I like it. I would still describe Metallia though. Is she a woman or a mass of black energy? If she's staying at her altar then it's important to know since it would give the impression that she's been seen by Beryl at least as a goddess.

*pokes* Have her devour their souls. Why else should they be sacrificed on the altar? Since this has all the makings of a cult it would make sense. :D

By the way, I noticed an error here:
"Beryl tried to hide5555556 the spurt of desire that coursed through her"

[sheankelor]

HAhaha I didn't even notice "Sam's help" until you pointed it out.

As to Metallia's description,it is way back in the story. She looks like a classic elf, not the cute little things, but the tall stately deadly type.

*Flinches away for idea* That is harder for me to write than killing some one, which was hard enough. I'll see what I can do.

But I'm glad you liked it even with lack of stuff^-^