Soon and very soon... Well, okay, maybe not too soon. At least two more chapters and then you will (hopefully) understand. I am trying to keep it a bit secretive until the end, though, so let me know when you figure it out? I've tossed out a couple of well hidden (I think) hints, but so far you haven't caught them. I hope. ^-^ And it is an excellent reason. Mamoru knows that. But Usa really needs to see her family in spite of it and she knows that, too.
I have an idea, and it would be a really good one, but it depends on the universe you are playing in. And I'll finish reading later tonight. I had to get some sleep last night.
No problem. I understand all about sleep, hahaha. Wish I had gotten some good stuff last night. *yawn*
You might have gotten it. You're pretty good at picking up on my brainwaves. ^-^ I think the fourth chapter is where the hints start to get bigger. Let me know (maybe in Y!R&R?) when you figure it out? As for the 'verse, it's a newish one. I think I've mentioned it once, but this is the first set of stories I've actually written in it.
I can't see anything to suggest that would make this better. It all came out really well. Hooker is still here too, so I must go read part three >_>
Ah, I did think of something that you might want to consider: describe adult Shingo, how's he's grown and such. How different he might be now compared to the anime/manga
Hmmm... Describing Shingo would be hard, which you might understand now that you've read the whole thing (sans the chapter or two I haven't written yet). That's part of the hook, right? I'll see if I can come up with something suitably innocuous... If not, it's all right?
Hmmm, you can mention small things, like the look in his eyes, deep voice, his height for sure since that's a given. I think too if you mention the time line on this, that its been so many years, it doesnt give the hook away, it just makes the reader really want to know what's up. I'm pretty sure the hook would stay safe.
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Title help.. hahaha yeah right. None over here, but I would love to know why they are avoiding the family.
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You might have gotten it. You're pretty good at picking up on my brainwaves. ^-^ I think the fourth chapter is where the hints start to get bigger. Let me know (maybe in Y!R&R?) when you figure it out? As for the 'verse, it's a newish one. I think I've mentioned it once, but this is the first set of stories I've actually written in it.
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Ah, I did think of something that you might want to consider: describe adult Shingo, how's he's grown and such. How different he might be now compared to the anime/manga
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