Part 4 I think. I'm debating splitting this one in two and covering Scream with it.
And it is started. In fact, I wanted to work on it last night instead of iconning. *sigh* So, I didn't get much done on either. But, I mailed it to work so I can continue slugging on. ^-^
This part here got me confused: "No ancient queens had muffled their power to soothe traumatized senshi." If she's four, how would she know about that?
Everything else is golden though. Not letting the reader know about the fear and it's origin keeps the suspense up.
You know, I debated about that sentence. I put it in and took it out about four times. In fact, when Ree read this, it wasn't there. It just seemed to add some balance to the paragraph. I had hoped it could be read from God view as opposed to Mako view, but if it tripped you up, I guess not. *goes off to strike it once more*
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And it is started. In fact, I wanted to work on it last night instead of iconning. *sigh* So, I didn't get much done on either. But, I mailed it to work so I can continue slugging on. ^-^
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Everything else is golden though. Not letting the reader know about the fear and it's origin keeps the suspense up.
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